In this letter, the homeowner gave his/her friend who want to sell home an advice. With strong reconmodation of Adams Realty, the owner compared statistics of the given two company, even told the story of his/her own.While all those statistics do not represent a certain case and the two deals that the owner expericed do not contribute to the judgement that Adams Realty could sell the owner's friends home quickly with a higher price, compared with Fitch Realty.
Firstly, Statistics do not mean everything.Apparently, Adams Realty have more eastate agents than Fitch Realty, whose agents work part-time.Despite of full-time agents who serve the clients in Adam Realty, it doesn't on behalf of high efficiency of selling houses. Perhaps the agents in Fitch Realty get paid by the deals, the more, the better, he/she makes. Due to the development of the Internet, it needn't to be a full-time job, the agents could work online. it's not the scale of a company could determine the service, if the owner's friend want to sell home, maybe the little company could offer a better service in case of the companies' concept which inspire hard-working agents.
Secondly,the revenue of a company depend on a lot of factors, with no value of reference to the owner's friend. The letter mentioned the two companies' sum of income last year. Again, the Adam Realty wins obviously.But it didn'd analyze the component of the income.Fitch Realty, the small company, may be good at selling little home like condle or apartment. The Adam Realty, on the other hand, colud be good at selling big houses,which are much more expenseive.The owner didn't tell us what kind of home of the friend, the data have no value of reference.
Thirdly, the homeowner told the friend the cases of selling two homes,but the time and location has changed a lot.First was 10 years ago with Fitch Realty, which maybe outdated.there could be a shift of agents at Fitch Realty in the last 10 years.Complained the first house wasn't be sold until 4 month later, the owner didn't tell us where the first home located and the quality of it.It could be difficult to sell if the home located at rural area. with a bad quality of the house, it would be worse.Likewise, the second one wer much better,while the owner attribute the good deal to the Adam Realy.Without the information of the latter one, we do not know the location and quality of the second home.As I can see, maybe the second one located at a very popular block next to some pop star's house and much bigger than previous one.So it would be imprudent to conclude the Adam Realty sells home better.
If the firend of the homeowner want to sell the home quickly and at a higher price, It would be better to correspond to homeowner to ask in the details,or visit the two comapany and talk with agents directly.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: With strong reconmodation of Adams Realty, the owner compared statistics of the given two company, even told the story of his/her own.While all those statistics do not represent a certain case and the two deals that the owner expericed do not contribute to the judgement that Adams Realty could sell the owner's friends home quickly with a higher price, compared with Fitch Realty.
Error: judgement Suggestion: No alternate word
Error: reconmodation Suggestion: recommendation
Error: expericed Suggestion: expedited
Sentence: The Adam Realty, on the other hand, colud be good at selling big houses,which are much more expenseive.The owner didn't tell us what kind of home of the friend, the data have no value of reference.
Error: expenseive Suggestion: expensive
Sentence: If the firend of the homeowner want to sell the home quickly and at a higher price, It would be better to correspond to homeowner to ask in the details,or visit the two comapany and talk with agents directly.
Error: firend Suggestion: fired
Error: comapany Suggestion: company
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 5 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 516 350
No. of Characters: 2268 1500
No. of Different Words: 225 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.766 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.395 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.259 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 141 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 87 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 48 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 25.479 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.405 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.666 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.226 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 73, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'advice'.
Suggestion: advice
...ve his/her friend who want to sell home an advice. With strong reconmodation of Adams Rea...
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Line 1, column 218, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: While
...any, even told the story of his/her own.While all those statistics do not represent a...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 44, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Apparently
...stly, Statistics do not mean everything.Apparently, Adams Realty have more eastate agents ...
^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 141, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Despite
...tch Realty, whose agents work part-time.Despite of full-time agents who serve the clien...
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Line 3, column 210, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...ho serve the clients in Adam Realty, it doesnt on behalf of high efficiency of selling...
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Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: needn't
... to the development of the Internet, it neednt to be a full-time job, the agents could...
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Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Its
...time job, the agents could work online. its not the scale of a company could determ...
^^^
Line 3, column 462, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
...time job, the agents could work online. its not the scale of a company could determ...
^^^
Line 3, column 631, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'companies'' or 'company's'?
Suggestion: companies'; company's
...d offer a better service in case of the companies concept which inspire hard-working agen...
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Line 5, column 9, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , the
...inspire hard-working agents. Secondly,the revenue of a company depend on a lot of...
^^^^
Line 5, column 215, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
.... Again, the Adam Realty wins obviously.But it didnd analyze the component of the i...
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Line 5, column 264, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Fitch
...dnd analyze the component of the income.Fitch Realty, the small company, may be good ...
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Line 5, column 429, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , which
...and, colud be good at selling big houses,which are much more expenseive.The owner didn...
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Line 5, column 461, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: The
...g houses,which are much more expenseive.The owner didnt tell us what kind of home o...
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Line 5, column 471, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...hich are much more expenseive.The owner didnt tell us what kind of home of the friend...
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Line 7, column 70, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...he friend the cases of selling two homes,but the time and location has changed a lot...
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Line 7, column 115, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: First
...the time and location has changed a lot.First was 10 years ago with Fitch Realty, whi...
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Line 7, column 248, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Complained
...ts at Fitch Realty in the last 10 years.Complained the first house wasnt be sold until 4 m...
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Line 7, column 275, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wasn't
...ast 10 years.Complained the first house wasnt be sold until 4 month later, the owner ...
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Line 7, column 297, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'month' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'months'.
Suggestion: months
...d the first house wasnt be sold until 4 month later, the owner didnt tell us where th...
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Line 7, column 320, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
... be sold until 4 month later, the owner didnt tell us where the first home located an...
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Line 7, column 385, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: It
...irst home located and the quality of it.It could be difficult to sell if the home ...
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Line 7, column 450, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: With
...sell if the home located at rural area. with a bad quality of the house, it would be...
^^^^
Line 7, column 501, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Likewise
...quality of the house, it would be worse.Likewise, the second one wer much better,while t...
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Line 7, column 541, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , while
...Likewise, the second one wer much better,while the owner attribute the good deal to th...
^^^^^^
Line 7, column 600, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: Without
...tribute the good deal to the Adam Realy.Without the information of the latter one, we d...
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Line 7, column 702, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: As
...location and quality of the second home.As I can see, maybe the second one located...
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Line 7, column 832, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: So
...house and much bigger than previous one.So it would be imprudent to conclude the A...
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Line 9, column 152, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , or
...spond to homeowner to ask in the details,or visit the two comapany and talk with ag...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, but, first, firstly, if, likewise, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, while, kind of, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.6327345309 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 55.5748502994 115% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2343.0 2260.96107784 104% => OK
No of words: 489.0 441.139720559 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79141104294 5.12650576532 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.56307096286 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7446033205 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 229.0 204.123752495 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.468302658487 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 722.7 705.55239521 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 15.0 8.76447105788 171% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 37.0 22.8473053892 162% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 130.561735834 57.8364921388 226% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 180.230769231 119.503703932 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 37.6153846154 23.324526521 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.46153846154 5.70786347227 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 29.0 5.25449101796 552% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173597209099 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072154744376 0.0743258471296 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443293300589 0.0701772020484 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10892637079 0.128457276422 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0359613207101 0.0628817314937 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 19.9 14.3799401198 138% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.38 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.5 12.197005988 135% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.5979740519 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 98.500998004 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 12.3882235529 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 16.8 11.1389221557 151% => OK
text_standard: 17.0 11.9071856287 143% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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