In the editorial from the newsletter published by Appleton school district, the author concludes that families should have as many meals together as possible since this action will greatly benefits youngsters and turns troubled teens away from delinquencies and bad behaviors. The author reaches this conclusion based on a recent survey indicating the more adolescents have meals with their families, the less they are prone to doing or showing bad behaviors or violations. Nonetheless, while the conclusion drawn by the author might hold water, it rests on several unfounded assumptions that, if not substantiated, dramatically weaken the persuasiveness of the argument. Therefore, the following two questions must be addressed.
First of all, all are the student in the survey are native or some of them are international or live by themselves in this area? It is possible that local students, who by the way live with their parents and have the most of their meals with their family on the weekly basis, lie about their usage of drugs or alcohol since they afraid that the interviewers will report their misbehaviors to their families. On the other hand, those students and youth living by themselves tell the truth about their amount of usage of these illegal drugs or beverages. Moreover, the depression or lower grades maybe more widespread among international students that are involve in household choirs and must tolerate the difficulties of living by themselves. These international students are not able to have meals with their families even if they want to. Therefore, the author must differentiate between international and local students. If either of these scenarios has merit, the author's assertion that those students live by their family are less susceptible to use of drugs, illegal drinks, or depression and mental issues is significantly hampered.
Secondly, what are other factors contributing to depression, low self-esteem, or low grades? Maybe those local students who grades are the lowest do not have meal with their families because of other factors, for instance family private issues or constantly struggles in their homes between parents. This means that lower frequency of having meals with family and mental, physical, or educational issues that these students have confronted are all the result of those factor. Therefore, the frequency of having meal with family cannot be a decisive factor. Other more important factors should be considered to determine the root of these students mental or physical unhealthiness. If it is true that less frequency of having meals with family and more use of drugs or prevalence of depression among these youngster are all the result of other more significant issues, the credibility of the writer's claim substantially decreases.
To recapitulate, it is possible that having meals with family have a direct correlation with the rate of delinquencies among adolescents or less omnipresence of depression among them. Nevertheless, as it stands now, the argument relies on several unanswered questions and groundless assumptions. Therefore, the author must provide answers to all these additional question two of which are mentioned above.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 502 350
No. of Characters: 2657 1500
No. of Different Words: 221 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.733 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.293 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.873 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 189 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 115 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 80 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 25.1 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.936 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.75 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.319 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.5 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 190, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'benefit'
Suggestion: benefit
...possible since this action will greatly benefits youngsters and turns troubled teens awa...
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Line 3, column 655, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'involved'.
Suggestion: involved
...d among international students that are involve in household choirs and must tolerate t...
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Line 3, column 968, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
...ither of these scenarios has merit, the authors assertion that those students live by t...
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Line 5, column 800, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this youngster' or 'these youngsters'?
Suggestion: this youngster; these youngsters
...drugs or prevalence of depression among these youngster are all the result of other more signif...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, for instance, by the way, first of all, it is true, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 11.1786427146 215% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 28.8173652695 174% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 55.5748502994 131% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2715.0 2260.96107784 120% => OK
No of words: 502.0 441.139720559 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.40836653386 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.56307096286 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96016003282 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 204.123752495 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46015936255 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 838.8 705.55239521 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.7277954205 57.8364921388 112% => OK
Chars per sentence: 135.75 119.503703932 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35 5.70786347227 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197279477477 0.218282227539 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639581086957 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0635539244271 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127521121829 0.128457276422 99% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390796195073 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.6 14.3799401198 115% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.64 48.3550499002 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.197005988 116% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.39 12.5979740519 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.75 8.32208582834 105% => OK
difficult_words: 123.0 98.500998004 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 12.3882235529 157% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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