Nowadays, people struggle with so many things on a daily basis. They have to cope with many stuff and difficulties simultaneously every day. Consequently, it is natural and completely makes sense if people feel some sort of boredom in today's intricate world than people who lived decades ago. There are different opinions toward this interminable people's feeling of boredom. Some people hold the idea that stemming from a lack of imagination and self-motivation, boredom should be considered a source of embarrassment. However, others, with whom my standpoint is aligned, believe that boredom can be belonged to any source except for embarrassment. In what follows, I will delineate my viewpoint on the ground of two persuasive reasons.
Without a doubt, the most consequential point corroborating my stance on this subject is that the pervasiveness of boredom and lack of interest, which is evident in many of today's peoples regardless of their nationality or where they live, is due to millions of efforts they have done and being unable to achieve what they want because of outside factors. For instance, consider an engineer who has been working for five years in a company. In the first years of his career, surely, he was very passionate about his job and tasks, and he did whatever he could to help the company reach its goals. Imagine, for example, he thought that after five years of hard-working, he would be promoted and be able to buy the car or the house he always wanted. But now, he sees himself still in the position as same as five years ago, without attaining any of his goals. Even if he were promoted, he could not buy the stuff he always wanted because of, for instance, the high rate of inflation in his country. It is logical that his zeal has declined during these years, and he feels a high level of boredom now. This sort of boredom has nothing to do with a lack of imagination or self-motivation, but other factors, which were not under his control, made him become what he is now. This is what is currently happening in countries like Iran, which suffer from a high inflation rate.
Although the previous reason is the first one crossing the mind at first glance, another remarkable point deserving some words here is that not every feeling of boredom is long-lasting. The human brain has a certain capacity. This capacity differs from person to person. Nonetheless, eventually, when the capacity of a person's brain reaches its maximum level, he becomes bored and feels tired. In this situation, people might lose their passion or stimulus for a while but can retrieve it. This kind of boredom is ephemeral. Psychologists unanimously agree that under this condition, people should shelve their tasks and unwind from their daily activities to let their brains regain their power. This kind of boredom is also widespread in today's people as most of them work arduously every day.
To make the long story short, and reflecting upon all the aforementioned grounds, one soon realizes that the boredom and lack of interest, which is seen in every people in today's societies, might have originated from different sources. It is neither fair nor rational to regard all types of boredom embarrassing as they might appear because outside factors intervene, or they could stem from a long period of hard-working, which is the transient type of boredom.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, nonetheless, so, still, while, except for, for example, for instance, kind of, sort of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.4196629213 97% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 33.0505617978 188% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 78.0 58.6224719101 133% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2810.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 569.0 442.535393258 129% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93848857645 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.88402711743 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76912355369 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 293.0 215.323595506 136% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514938488576 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 874.8 704.065955056 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 6.24550561798 256% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.77640449438 338% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.38483146067 160% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4539429667 60.3974514979 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.076923077 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8846153846 23.4991977007 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.03846153846 5.21951772744 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 14.0 5.13820224719 272% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209186787116 0.243740707755 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0605834192742 0.0831039109588 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0707706291562 0.0758088955206 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.136497364566 0.150359130593 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604525958836 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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