According to the article, the author believes that a business ought to only hire people who sleep less than 6 hours per night in order to success. Based on the study about Mentian advertising executives, the argument is very weak because some assumptions are not reliable.
Assuming that the study focused on advertising companies’ executives is convincing, the author argues that the association between the success of business and the average sleeping hours per night is cogent. However, the study has only rated 300 workers. The sample size is too small to lead to a reliable conclusion. Maybe the connection between sleeping hours and higher profit is just a coincidence. In addition, maybe the executives had lied in the research because they didn’t want to be seen as lazy. If the study itself is not cogent, the result is likely to be unreliable.
Even if the study is reliable, it is not wise to assume that other kinds of businesses would be the same as the advertising industry. The executives rated are all in the advertising industry. Maybe workers in advertising industry need to sleep less and work longer, while others don’t need to. Thus, It is not reasonable to apply the result of the study to all kinds of businesses.
In addition, if it is true that the connection between less sleeping hours and higher profit play an important role in all business, it would still be difficult for companies to only hire people who sleep less than 6 hours per night. In the argument, the author assume that it is feasible to take such an action in choosing workers. But actually it is quite difficult to do that, because the candidates may lie to gain the job opportunities. It is difficult for companies to prove the truth as well. Thus, the assumption about the feasibility is not reliable.
In conclusion, the argument is not very strong unless these assumptions mentioned above are proved to be true. We need more information about the reliability of the study, the relation of that in other industries and the feasibility of measurements.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 2 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 352 350
No. of Characters: 1657 1500
No. of Different Words: 153 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.331 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.707 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.681 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 106 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 65 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.526 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.21 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.579 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.313 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.532 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.075 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 441, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'lain'.
Suggestion: lain
.... In addition, maybe the executives had lied in the research because they didn’t wan...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, however, if, may, so, still, thus, well, while, in addition, in conclusion, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1717.0 2260.96107784 76% => OK
No of words: 350.0 441.139720559 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.90571428571 5.12650576532 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32530772707 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80923985651 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 164.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468571428571 0.468620217663 100% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 705.55239521 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 11.0 8.76447105788 126% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 48.5608394146 57.8364921388 84% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.3684210526 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4210526316 23.324526521 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31578947368 5.70786347227 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.67664670659 171% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247432233798 0.218282227539 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0703855313043 0.0743258471296 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.073469971167 0.0701772020484 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.129987037443 0.128457276422 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0802465894789 0.0628817314937 128% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 14.3799401198 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 48.3550499002 128% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 12.197005988 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 12.5979740519 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 98.500998004 73% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 12.3882235529 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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