The following appeared as part of an article in the education section of a Waymarsh City newspaper.
“Throughout the last two decades, those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Those with graduate degrees from Waymarsh University had an especially hard time finding such jobs. But better times are coming in the next decade for all academic job seekers, including those from Waymarsh. Demographic trends indicate that an increasing number of people will be reaching college age over the next ten years; consequently, we can expect that the job market will improve dramatically for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields.”
In the argument, the author states that the job market will improve dramatically over the next decade for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields. To support his claim, he cites the demographic data that indicates the number of people reaching college age will be increasing in the ten years. The argument presented by the author is far-fetched and is based on unverified assumptions. Hence, the author needs to provide more evidence to make the argument more persuasive.
First off, the author states that those who earned graduate degrees found it very difficult to get jobs teaching their academic specialties at the college level. Nevertheless, the author fails to take into account other facts that might contribute to such situation. Artificial Intelligence, for example, is a rising subject, and there are tons of job vacancies. Traditional literature, on the other hand, is falling, and no one even wants to study that anymore. Thus, this argument is unwarranted without excluding such academic trends.
Moreover, even though the number of people reaching college age will increase in the next decade, there is no indication that everyone reaching that age will attend college. Perhaps there is another financial crisis that results in fewer and fewer people enroll in college, and thus makes the job acquisition even harder. Or the acceptance number remains the same, only the application number increases, so the need for new teachers is unnecessary.
To sum up, it might be true that the job market will improve dramatically over the next decade for people seeking college-level teaching positions in their fields. Yet, the author’s argument is built upon some assumptions that are not proven to be true. Therefore, the author should provide more details to support his argument. One example is hardly sufficient to form a general conclusion.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
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argument 1 -- OK
argument 2 -- OK
argument 3 -- ?
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minimum 3 arguments wanted.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 299 350
No. of Characters: 1540 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.158 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.151 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.683 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 120 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 85 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 18.688 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.212 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.688 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.332 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.528 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.07 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 429, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n the other hand, is falling, and no one even wants to study that anymore. Thus, ...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, if, moreover, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, for example, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 13.6137724551 81% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1593.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 299.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32775919732 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1583189471 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81495303373 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 204.123752495 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.551839464883 0.468620217663 118% => OK
syllable_count: 498.6 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 22.8473053892 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.7337868147 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5625 119.503703932 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6875 23.324526521 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.8125 5.70786347227 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.149334676402 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0494529195186 0.0743258471296 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.110859814964 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0960152005941 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0859887305948 0.0628817314937 137% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.197005988 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 12.3882235529 89% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.1389221557 83% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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