The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
'The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.'
This argument is flawed for numerous reasons. Primarily as seen by the prompt statement, the argument is based on the unwarranted assumption that the inability of a country to check and monitor the number of illegal immigrants entering the country is a trigger for economic danger, hereby rendering the main conclusion that returning all illegal immigrants to their country of origin an invalid one.
Though it is an anomaly that a country is unable to check its illegal immigrants and put up structures to decrease the propensity, it is not an uncommon occurrence in the world. This argument fails to justify the connection between the presence of illegal immigrants in a country and the effects on the economic conditions. For instance Spain, a country lauded as a great vacationing resort for millions around the world is one that utilizes its landscape to boost its economy with only tourist sites delivering over $2 billion annually to the country's pockets. One worthy thing of note is that Spain also houses the largest amount of illegal immigrants in the world, with most of them making a living from being tour guides and recreational assistants at the country's tourist locations.
More significantly, autonomy according to the oxford dictionary is described as the presence of personal independence and the capacity to make their own decisions. It is very unclear as to how this quality of a country is related to the presence of illegal immigrants and how making them return to their countries of origin will develop an autonomous country that is personally independent.
Had the argument provided substantial information, proof or justification regarding the negative economic connection between the presence of illegal immigrants and the national identity of a nation as well as the economic decline that is usually associated with illegal immigrants, the stance would have been more logical and acceptable.
However, the argument leaves pertinent questions such as the proven threats that illegal immigrants pose and the past records of illegal immigrants as well as their negative effects on the economic outlook of a country unanswered.
Finally, the argument also claims without warrant that sending illegal immigrants to their countries of origin will be the panacea that is required. There is also no proof provided to justify this stance as sending the illegal immigrants out of the country in question should logically suffice and has nothing to do with their countries of origin.
Seeing that the argument makes proven unwarranted assumptions as highlighted above, the basis of its conclusion is not cogent and it fails to make a convincing case that the autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 3 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 4 2
No. of Sentences: 13 15
No. of Words: 442 350
No. of Characters: 2270 1500
No. of Different Words: 203 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.585 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.136 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.812 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 191 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 158 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 98 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 61 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.241 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.538 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.42 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.745 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.175 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 7 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 517, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... with only tourist sites delivering over billion annually to the countrys pockets...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, however, if, look, regarding, so, well, as to, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.6327345309 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 13.6137724551 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 16.3942115768 128% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2315.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 441.0 441.139720559 100% => OK
Chars per words: 5.24943310658 5.12650576532 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58257569496 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86476326025 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 204.123752495 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.460317460317 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 731.7 705.55239521 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 22.8473053892 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.2589589987 57.8364921388 134% => OK
Chars per sentence: 178.076923077 119.503703932 149% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.9230769231 23.324526521 145% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.46153846154 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 7.0 5.15768463074 136% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.20758483034 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 6.88822355289 145% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.355874922546 0.218282227539 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137358051198 0.0743258471296 185% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0617137796992 0.0701772020484 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180454713934 0.128457276422 140% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0539938391523 0.0628817314937 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.3 14.3799401198 141% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 29.52 48.3550499002 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.3 12.197005988 142% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 12.5979740519 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.36 8.32208582834 112% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 98.500998004 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 11.1389221557 136% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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