The following argument was made in a newspaper editorial:
“The autonomy of any country is based on the strength of its borders; if the number of illegal immigrants entering a country cannot be checked, both its economy and national identity are endangered. Because illegal immigrants pose such threats, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.”
In the newspaper editorial, the argument has a conclusion which stated that because illegal immigrants pose threats on both the economy and national identity of a country, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin. However, before this recommendation can be properly evaluated, two questions must be answered.
First of all, are the illegal immigrants criminals? In other words, do these people commit and have been apprehended severally for commiting antrocities in the country they migrate to? It is possible that, the number of criminals in the country is 'over-the-board' already and the country has an history of 'crazy' criminal act even before people started migrating there at all. There is a possibility that, the illegal immigrants are even more altruistic in nature than the citizens of the country. Perhaps, in the record list of criminals in the country, there has never been an illegal migrants' name enlisted. If either of the scenarios is true, then the conclusion drawn in the original argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, does the economy of a country rise when the illegal immigrants are returned to their country of origin? There is a likelihood that the legal immigrants are even the ones affecting the economy of the country. This is possible if the legal immigrants are inherently corrupt and came into the country with a bad notion. Perhaps, the so-called 'legal migrants' were only privileged to get their documents correct or probably got the documents in a dubious way. On getting to the check-point at the border, they were simply seen as the good ones whereas they are the source of the country's economic downfall. If the above is true, then the argument does not hold water.
In conclusion, this argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its reliance of several unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to answer the questions above (perhaps in the form of a systematic research study), then, it is possible to evaluate the viablity of the proposed recommendation that because illegal immigrants pose threats on both the economy and national identity of a country, every effort must be made to return them to their country of origin.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 8 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 7 2
No. of Sentences: 16 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1808 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.94 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.761 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 139 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 114 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 73 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 22.875 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.046 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.625 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.538 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.099 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 292, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...r-the-board already and the country has an history of crazy criminal act even befo...
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Line 5, column 448, Rule ID: IN_A_X_MANNER[1]
Message: Consider replacing "in a dubious way" with adverb for "dubious"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...s correct or probably got the documents in a dubious way. On getting to the check-point at the b...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, second, secondly, so, then, whereas, in conclusion, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 13.6137724551 51% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 55.5748502994 94% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 16.3942115768 43% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1856.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07103825137 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.821397786 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 204.123752495 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.48087431694 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 599.4 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 69.8864033629 57.8364921388 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 119.503703932 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.875 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.25 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.20758483034 73% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.284984327416 0.218282227539 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0876980713353 0.0743258471296 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.068981821686 0.0701772020484 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.1807713766 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420456146843 0.0628817314937 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.9 14.3799401198 97% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.42 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.09 8.32208582834 97% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 98.500998004 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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