Hospital statistics regarding people who go to the emergency room after roller-skating accidents indicate the need for more protective equipment. Within that group of people, 75 percent of those who had accidents in streets or parking lots had not been wearing any protective clothing (helmets, knee pads, etc.) or any light-reflecting material (clip-on lights, glow-in-the-dark wrist pads, etc.). Clearly, the statistics indicate that by investing in high-quality protective gear and reflective equipment, roller skaters will greatly reduce their risk of being severely injured in an accident.
Write a response in which you examine the stated and/or unstated assumptions of the argument. Be sure to explain how the argument depends on these assumptions and what the implications are for the argument if the assumptions prove unwarranted.
The author has described the need of investing in high-quality protective gear and reflective equipment for roller skaters to reduce the risk of being severely injured in an accident, by showing hospital statistics regarding people who require emergency treatment after roller-skating mishaps. According to the data, 75 percent of those who had accidents in streets or parking lots had neither been wearing any protective clothing such as helmets, knee pads, etc nor light-reflective equipment. While the above argument seems valid, certain aspects should be discussed.
The portion of beginner roller skaters who met an accident has not been specified in the given data. Isn't it possible that such a high percentage of accidents occurred due to the inexperience of roller skaters rather than due to not wearing protective equipment? what if the experienced roller skaters not wearing any protective equipment do not have such a high number of meeting accidents? This argument creates a discrepancy between what the author claims.
Do high-quality protective gear and reflective equipments work better in protecting the skaters? if not, by increasing the quality of these gears and equipment would make them heavier and may impact the performance of a skater and it could also cause the skater to disbalance, which would increase the risk of being severely injured.
While there is a need for skaters to wear protective gear and equipment, it is not the sole reason for safety for skaters. The experience of a skater may also contribute to their safety. Furthermore, investing in high-quality gear and equipment would not neccessarily reduce their risk of being severely injured in an accident.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 269 350
No. of Characters: 1403 1500
No. of Different Words: 138 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.05 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.216 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.921 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 110 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 89 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 60 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 15.385 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.4 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.4 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.066 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: Isn't
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Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: What
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Suggestion: If
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, may, regarding, so, while, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 11.1786427146 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 13.6137724551 37% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 10.0 28.8173652695 35% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1430.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 268.0 441.139720559 61% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33582089552 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.04607285448 4.56307096286 89% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97481445664 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.548507462687 0.468620217663 117% => OK
syllable_count: 441.9 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 3.0 8.76447105788 34% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 68.4860083034 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.166666667 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 23.324526521 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.16666666667 5.70786347227 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 5.25449101796 57% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.304759498981 0.218282227539 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106062572202 0.0743258471296 143% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.106805674228 0.0701772020484 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186582001989 0.128457276422 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147845875716 0.0628817314937 235% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.3799401198 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.3550499002 102% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.5979740519 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 64.0 98.500998004 65% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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