Based on the finding of the archaeologist the human has arrived 7000 years ago and the plethora of mammal species that existed on Kaliko island was extinct. As the archaeologist suggests that the cause of the extinct for mammals on that island could be extensive hunting as the remains of mammals and fishes were found out at the same place. The conclusion of the archaeologists was based on the remains of the mammals and fishes, I would like to undermine the conclusion as there can be other factors responsible for the extinction of those mammals.
The archaeologists have neglected the possibilities of natural disasters such as tsunami, as the islands are generally smaller in size and are surrounded by water bodies. Therefore, it is possible that the fishes can come onshore with the Tsumai and the flood can cause the extinction of mammals from the island. The natural disasters can result in the extinction of entire flora and fauna of the island.
Apart from the natural disaster, there can other causes such as plague can be the reason for the extinction of mammals in that era. The medication during that period was not as today, as may disease has been removed from the earth with the help of advanced medication and technology. The archaeologists have not mentioned anything as such in there survey, as the potential reason for there extinct.
The mammals are generally the most modest animal species on earth but its not true for all. Some mammals are extremely wild and can be a latent threat to civilization, the carnivorous animals can enter and exploit the entire village. Therefore it can possible that various mammals were killed in self-defence in order to protect the people of the island.
Therefore I would like to conclude that the facts should be looked at properly by the archaeologists other than giving their conclusion based on only weapons and remains of the animals found at the same place.
- Humans arrived in the Kaliko Islands about 7,000 years ago, and within 3,000 years most of the large mammal species that had lived in the forests of the Kaliko Islands were extinct. Previous archaeological findings have suggested t 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, look, may, so, therefore, apart from, as to, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 11.1786427146 98% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 15.0 28.8173652695 52% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 55.5748502994 81% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1618.0 2260.96107784 72% => OK
No of words: 326.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.96319018405 5.12650576532 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24917287072 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.72908923204 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 147.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.450920245399 0.468620217663 96% => OK
syllable_count: 504.0 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 4.96107784431 40% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 2.70958083832 148% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 19.7664670659 66% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.1864007719 57.8364921388 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.461538462 119.503703932 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0769230769 23.324526521 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38461538462 5.70786347227 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204424987719 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0881127491281 0.0743258471296 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0967849836325 0.0701772020484 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107519703146 0.128457276422 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0875075325076 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.78 12.5979740519 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.32208582834 101% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 98.500998004 74% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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