An international development organization, in response to a vitamin A deficiency among people in the impoverished nation of Tagus, has engineered a new breed of millet high in vitamin A. While seeds for this new type of millet cost more, farmers will be paid subsidies for farming the new variety of millet. Since millet is already a staple food in Tagus, people will readily adopt the new variety. To combat vitamin A deficiency, the government of Tagus should do everything it can to promote this new type of millet.
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered to decide whether the recommendation is likely to have the predicted result. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate the recommendation.
The argument states that an international development organization, in response to a Vitamin A deficiency among people in the nation of Tagus, they have engineered a new breed of millet high in Vitamin A. This breed which will be distributed to the farmers and planted should solve the problem of Vitamin A deficiency in the nation. Before this recommendation can be properly evaluated and predicted it has to answer the following three keys questions.
First of all, the argument assumes that when planting the new engineering millet type the result will be a new product similar in nature, that is in looks and taste to the old millet, yet higher in Vitamin A. The question is did the company perform any sample studies whereby the nature of this millet was investigated and the end product was tested among the inhabitants of Tagus. The seeds ought to be tested for productivity, performance, interaction with the soil and finally tested for their taste and acceptance by the inhabitants of the nation. The criteria of the Vitamin A is crucial, yet the acceptance of the seed and the end product is more important as the organization might face rejection for the crops.
Second, the argument states that the farmers who belong to an impoverished state will be paid subsidies in order to opt for this new breed of millet. The question is, even if the farmers planted this new breed of millet in order to benefit from the subsidies; who said that they will consume it and opt for it. Maybe the only reason they opt for it was the money factor. The argument assumes that people in this nation will readily drop their own millet and opt for this type, which is a hypothetical situation and might not happen.
Moreover, did the organization do a survey among the inhabitants of this nation to ask their opinion regarding this question. the major question is what do they feel about changing the old millet which is a staple food in their daily lives with a new engineering product. With such a scientific survey a lot questions would have been answered and the process would have more dpogmatic.
Finally, the argument needs to answer the above questions to render it liable and cogent.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 378 350
No. of Characters: 1776 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.409 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.698 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.62 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 123 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 83 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 53 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 37 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 31.5 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.378 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.363 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.664 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.088 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 226, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'done'.
Suggestion: done
...et higher in Vitamin A. The question is did the company perform any sample studies ...
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Line 3, column 126, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: The
... their opinion regarding this question. the major question is what do they feel abo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, if, look, may, moreover, regarding, second, so, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.6327345309 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 11.1786427146 107% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 55.5748502994 61% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1432.0 2260.96107784 63% => OK
No of words: 304.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.71052631579 5.12650576532 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17559525986 4.56307096286 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54672403768 2.78398813304 91% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 204.123752495 73% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.490131578947 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 441.0 705.55239521 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 9.0 8.76447105788 103% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 19.7664670659 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 22.8473053892 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.8587184555 57.8364921388 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.333333333 119.503703932 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.3333333333 23.324526521 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.70786347227 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.384184886114 0.218282227539 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132061937665 0.0743258471296 178% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0931367773655 0.0701772020484 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.18479502006 0.128457276422 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129610443133 0.0628817314937 206% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.4 14.3799401198 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 48.3550499002 113% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.33 12.5979740519 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.1389221557 108% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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