In this article, the author recommended the investment in Consolidated Industires because the temperatures in northeastern United States will continue to be lower than normal ones according to cimate forecasters and more homes are being built in this area. However, there are some assumptions need to be valued before making such decisions.
Firstly, the author says that in last heating season, that region suffered 90 days with lower temperatures than normal years, and some predictions shows that such weather will continue for more years. The author assumes that with colder winter, people who live in this region will cost more oil for heating in the future. But this underlying assumptions are still doubtful. Lower temperature may not be related to higher usage of heating oil, if the heating machine only have constant working power and require limited fuel. Besides, the weather prediction may not correct. No one could predict future temperature precisely. If the weather becomes warmer than prediction, the need of oil will reduce.
Secondly, the author mentions that many new homes are being constructed in this area because of the population growth. The author tries to prove that more heating oil is required in those new buildings. However, it is unwisely to assume that new homes will require more oil-based heating machine. For example, if the owners of new homes still live in their previous buildings or seek for cheaper heating equipment, the sales of home heating oil will not increase and the conclusion will be useless.
Finally, even if the previous assumption is accurate, the suggestion of investment is not convincing enough. It is unreasonable to assume that the increased demand of heating oil will help the growth of Consolidated Industries business. If local people prefer to use oil sold by another brand, the increased demand is irrelevant to this company. Moreover, even if the Consolidated Industries takes an important role in the sale of home heating oil, we can’t assume that the company development is largely influenced by oil service. To make final decision, we need more data to analyze.
To sum up, although the author suggest investment in Consolidated Industries, we can’t agree with such idea before those assumptions being valued.
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 3 2
No. of Sentences: 19 15
No. of Words: 366 350
No. of Characters: 1870 1500
No. of Different Words: 181 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.374 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.109 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.647 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 62 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 45 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.263 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 9.25 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.684 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.315 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.53 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.104 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, moreover, second, secondly, so, still, for example, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.9520958084 124% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 28.8173652695 80% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1930.0 2260.96107784 85% => OK
No of words: 366.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27322404372 5.12650576532 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37391431897 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73193440909 2.78398813304 98% => OK
Unique words: 185.0 204.123752495 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505464480874 0.468620217663 108% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 4.96107784431 121% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.76447105788 114% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 2.70958083832 258% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 19.7664670659 96% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 22.8473053892 83% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 57.479419417 57.8364921388 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.578947368 119.503703932 85% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2631578947 23.324526521 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.21052631579 5.70786347227 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.67664670659 107% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269255007511 0.218282227539 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0788933301662 0.0743258471296 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0700747021315 0.0701772020484 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.133328280828 0.128457276422 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0876479588004 0.0628817314937 139% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.3550499002 108% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 12.5979740519 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.98 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.1389221557 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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