"Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increased time to national news and less time to weather and local news. During this time period, most of the complaints received from viewers were concerned with our station's coverage of weather and local news. In addition, local businesses that used to advertise during our late-night news program have just canceled their advertising contracts with us. Therefore, in order to attract more viewers to the program and to avoid losing any further advertising revenues, we should restore the time devoted to weather and local news to its former level."
The author contends that, in order to attract more viewers to the program and losing further revenues from advertising, his television station should restore the time devoted tho weather and local news to its previous level. To support his conclusion, he cites various evedences. Although, these evidences appear to bolster the argument, a meticulous analysis will show otherwise. So, the writer need to cite the following specific evidences.
First of all, the writer presumes that, previously his Television station used to devote more time in wheather and local news. However, he has not cited, by how much time were allocated for this. This case may go in either way, if the time period were significantly increased, that may strengthen the argument, while if the duration were increase by just few minutes, then the author's assertion might go unwarranted.
Second of all, the writer assumes, local businesses that used to advertise during their late-night news programs canceled because of the decreased time period for weather and local news. Perhaps, this might not be the case, the local businesses might have canceled their advertising contracts because of their shortage of fund or may be they found the advertising ineffective. If either of this case were there, then the writer's contention may go baseless.
Third of all, the writer is assuming that, time for weather and local news for restoring the advertising contracts matters the most. He presumes, time plays a pivotal role in attracting them, however, they may have cancelled their advetisement because of the television takes expensive rate. Perhaps, ther might be other televisons which provides the same advertisement for the cheaper amount.
In conclusion, in order to persuade me in his contention, he needs to elucidate the above specific evidences. Without these specific evidences, he couldnot convince me in his assertion.
Comments
e-rater score report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 5 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 13 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 301 350
No. of Characters: 1555 1500
No. of Different Words: 161 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.165 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.166 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.677 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 20.067 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.903 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.35 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.35 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.155 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 165, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
.... However, he has not cited, by how much time were allocated for this. This case ...
^^
Line 2, column 378, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'authors'' or 'author's'?
Suggestion: authors'; author's
... increase by just few minutes, then the authors assertion might go unwarranted. Second...
^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 330, Rule ID: MAY_BE[1]
Message: Did you mean 'maybe' (=perhaps)?
Suggestion: maybe
...ts because of their shortage of fund or may be they found the advertising ineffective....
^^^^^^
Line 3, column 421, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ither of this case were there, then the writers contention may go baseless. Third of a...
^^^^^^^
Line 4, column 150, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...acts matters the most. He presumes, time plays a pivotal role in attracting them,...
^^
Line 4, column 255, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... cancelled their advetisement because of the television takes expensive rate. Per...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, so, then, third, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 28.8173652695 108% => OK
Preposition: 32.0 55.5748502994 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1604.0 2260.96107784 71% => OK
No of words: 301.0 441.139720559 68% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.32890365449 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16525528304 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76876765473 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 204.123752495 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.541528239203 0.468620217663 116% => OK
syllable_count: 502.2 705.55239521 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 4.96107784431 222% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 22.8473053892 88% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.532172857 57.8364921388 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.933333333 119.503703932 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0666666667 23.324526521 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6 5.70786347227 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.20758483034 85% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276844867458 0.218282227539 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0907927058192 0.0743258471296 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.107156503552 0.0701772020484 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150852966684 0.128457276422 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0825051163802 0.0628817314937 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 14.3799401198 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.3550499002 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.197005988 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.63 12.5979740519 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.19 8.32208582834 110% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 98.500998004 88% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.1389221557 90% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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