“A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.”
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
The author states that since the use of salicylates is correlated with the decline of headache of an average citizen of Mentia, its new use can be expected to result in a continued steady decline in the headache of Mentia's average citizen. However, this needs more evidence to convincingly explain the argument.
First, the author states that the rise in the commercial use of salicylates is correlated with the decrease in headache. But this does not guarantee that salicylateds acts as a cause to mitigate headache. For instance, it may be possible that there is some other substance also whose commercial use has risen in the past few decades and that causes a decrease in the headache. Unless the author provides a scientific explanation behind the role of salicylates in the decrease of headaches, his argument is not compelling enough.
Second, the author says that with the new use of salicylates, we can expect a continued steady decrease in headaches. However, it may be plausible that after a certain time the human body starts showing resistance towards it thereby resulting in the decrease of its effectiveness as a mitigator of headaches. If this happens then there may not be a continuous steady decrease in the headaches of an average citizen of Mentia.
Finally, the author subtly suggests that salicylates resulted in the decrease of headaches when used as a food preservative and so will decrease headaches when used as a flavour additive too. But this cannot be guaranteed without proper experiments. It may be the case that salicylates work diifferently as a food preservative in comparison to as a flavour additive, perhaps because of the differences in the conditions how it is added to food. In such a case, we may not see a decrease in headaches when it is used as flavour additive. Unless it can be conspicuously confirmed that salicylates decrease headaches when used as a flavour additive, his argument is weak and needs more evidence.
Therefore, the argument given by the author that the use of salicylates has a correlation with decrease in headaches and so its use as a flavour additive will result in a continued steady decline needs more evidence. Until then, his explanations for his argument are not strong enough.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 310, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'finally', 'first', 'however', 'if', 'may', 'second', 'so', 'then', 'therefore', 'for instance']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.230958230958 0.25644967241 90% => OK
Verbs: 0.135135135135 0.15541462614 87% => OK
Adjectives: 0.0909090909091 0.0836205057962 109% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0589680589681 0.0520304965353 113% => OK
Pronouns: 0.039312039312 0.0272364105082 144% => Less pronouns wanted. Try not to use 'you, I, they, he...' as the subject of a sentence
Prepositions: 0.164619164619 0.125424944231 131% => OK
Participles: 0.034398034398 0.0416121511921 83% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.99278122737 2.79052419416 107% => OK
Infinitives: 0.012285012285 0.026700313972 46% => Some infinitives wanted.
Particles: 0.0 0.001811407834 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.130221130221 0.113004496875 115% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.027027027027 0.0255425247493 106% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.017199017199 0.0127820249294 135% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 2257.0 2731.13054187 83% => OK
No of words: 376.0 446.07635468 84% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 6.00265957447 6.12365571057 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40348946061 4.57801047555 96% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.382978723404 0.378187486979 101% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.316489361702 0.287650121315 110% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.239361702128 0.208842608468 115% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.159574468085 0.135150697306 118% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99278122737 2.79052419416 107% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 207.018472906 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.409574468085 0.469332199767 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
Word variations: 42.2844873576 52.1807786196 81% => OK
How many sentences: 16.0 20.039408867 80% => OK
Sentence length: 23.5 23.2022227129 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.2741745755 57.7814097925 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.0625 141.986410481 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.5 23.2022227129 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.724660767414 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.14285714286 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 3.58251231527 28% => OK
Readability: 55.1489361702 51.9672348444 106% => OK
Elegance: 1.84210526316 1.8405768891 100% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.342415102996 0.441005458295 78% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.145719686832 0.135418324435 108% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.110114237266 0.0829849096947 133% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.605034599376 0.58762219726 103% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.203147051011 0.147661913831 138% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.163311179057 0.193483328276 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.102674942994 0.0970749176394 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.453346612666 0.42659136922 106% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0648218985205 0.0774707102158 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.263248190048 0.312017818177 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.043502213768 0.0698173142475 62% => The ideas may be duplicated in paragraphs.
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 8.33743842365 24% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.87684729064 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.82512315271 187% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 2.0 6.46551724138 31% => OK
Negative topic words: 4.0 5.36822660099 75% => OK
Neutral topic words: 8.0 2.82389162562 283% => OK
Total topic words: 14.0 14.657635468 96% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6 -- The score is based on the average performance of 20,000 argument essays. This e-grader is not smart enough to check on arguments.
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