The vice president claims that by installing the electronic internet monitoring systems, will result in preventing employees from wasting time and thereby improve overall profits and foster a better work ethic at Climpson. However, these assumptions made by vice president is highly presumptuous and before evaluating the argument the following three assumptions of the argument should be addressed.
To begin with, the vice president assumes that by monitoring the internet use from their workstation by their employees will foster a better work ethic. In a pragmatic scenario, ironically if the employees were to be punished due to their use of internet there could have an adverse effect on the work culture at Climpson, thus instead of promulgating a better work ethic this could result in denigrating it. Moreover, if the employee were to use the Internet from their workstation for some official work, it would be difficult to determine which employee used internet for work and which did not. Thus there the vice president should be more explicit in explaining the electronic internet monitoring systems.
Secondly, by installing internet monitoring systems does not prove that the employees will not waste their time. Although monitoring the internet consumption could help, but the time wasted in the offline activities is not monitored. Perhaps, the employee’s productivity is directly proportional to the mental relief. By monitoring the internet usage, limiting the number of hours spent on personal or recreational activities, could negatively affect the mental health thereby reducing the overall productivity. If these scenarios hold true, it significantly undermines the argument proposed by the vice president.
Lastly, the assumption that the overall profits is directly proportional to the increase in the number of the working hours, is highly presumptuous statement. The profit of the company dependents of various factors other than increase in the number of working hours, such as the overall business model of the company, the infrastructure of the financial accountants and more. Thus the assumptions considered by the vice president will not hold water if these scenarios hold true.
In conclusion, the argument, as it stands now, is considerably flawed due to its severe dependence in various unwarranted assumptions. If the vice president is able to address these assumption and provide evidence ( perhaps in terms of a systematic research analysis), then it is possible to fully evaluate the viability of the conclusion provided by the vice president.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Suggestion: Thus,
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Message: Did you mean 'this assumption' or 'these assumptions'?
Suggestion: this assumption; these assumptions
...f the vice president is able to address these assumption and provide evidence perhaps in terms ...
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...ss these assumption and provide evidence perhaps in terms of a systematic researc...
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Suggestion:
... a systematic research analysis, then it is possible to fully evaluate the viabil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 397.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52644836272 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01682894907 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478589420655 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8329272157 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.125 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8125 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320917134451 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109182141809 0.0743258471296 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878242514109 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167605505804 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106899345014 0.0628817314937 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 259, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...pson. However, these assumptions made by vice president is highly presumptuous an...
^^
Line 3, column 600, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...ed internet for work and which did not. Thus there the vice president should be more...
^^^^
Line 5, column 377, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
... of the financial accountants and more. Thus the assumptions considered by the vice ...
^^^^
Line 6, column 177, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this assumption' or 'these assumptions'?
Suggestion: this assumption; these assumptions
...f the vice president is able to address these assumption and provide evidence perhaps in terms ...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 6, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ss these assumption and provide evidence perhaps in terms of a systematic researc...
^^
Line 6, column 275, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... a systematic research analysis, then it is possible to fully evaluate the viabil...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, lastly, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, thus, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 13.6137724551 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 20.0 28.8173652695 69% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 55.5748502994 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2194.0 2260.96107784 97% => OK
No of words: 397.0 441.139720559 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.52644836272 5.12650576532 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46372701284 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01682894907 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 204.123752495 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.478589420655 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 682.2 705.55239521 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.8329272157 57.8364921388 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.125 119.503703932 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8125 23.324526521 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.6875 5.70786347227 117% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.20758483034 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320917134451 0.218282227539 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109182141809 0.0743258471296 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0878242514109 0.0701772020484 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167605505804 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106899345014 0.0628817314937 170% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.3799401198 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 38.66 48.3550499002 80% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.197005988 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.09 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.32208582834 108% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 98.500998004 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.