The following memorandum is from the business manager of Happy Pancake House restaurants. "Recently, butter has been replaced by margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants throughout the southwestern United States. This change, however, has had little impact on our customers. In fact, only about 2 percent of customers have complained, indicating that an average of 98 people out of 100 are happy with the change. Furthermore, many servers have reported that a number of customers who ask for butter do not complain when they are given margarine instead. Clearly, either these customers do not distinguish butter from margarine or they use the term 'butter' to refer to either butter or margarine."
Write a response in which you discuss one or more alternative explanations that could rival the proposed explanation and explain how your explanation(s) can plausibly account for the facts presented in the argument.
Author has presented the scenario of Happy Pancake House restaurants. In Southwestern United States butter has replaced by Margarine in Happy Pancake House restaurants. The consequences of this replacement is mentioned in the further passage. It has been observed that this change is accepted by almost all the customers except 2% customers. The reason behind the acceptance of margarine is assumed by the author, and the alternative explanations for the proposed assumption are as follows.
Butter and margarine both are the kind of fats, butter is produced from the animal fats whereas margarine is made from the vegetable oil and fats. In Happy Pancake House restaurants butter is replaced by the margarine and reason behind this replacement is not mentioned by the author. Here there would have been many reasons like cost factor, taste of the two products, availability and many more.
According to the memorandum only 2% of the customers have complained against the change, but the reason behind their complains are not presented. These 2% customers may either dislike the taste of margarine or may be they are unhappy if the margarine is more expensive then butter. Here the production cost for butter and margarine and reduction in number of customers due to the change is not mentioned. So it is abstruse to get the correct profit measures and overall impact of the change.
According to the servers report when customers are served with margarine instead of butter they didn't complain. Author has assumed that either customers are unaware of the difference in the taste or they may be treating both as same. Here the author's assumption seems to be weaken here because the facts and evidence for the assumption are lacking. There can be another reasons like may be margarine is more nutritious than butter, or less expensive than the butter that's why customers didn't complain.
So the various aspects for both butter and margarine like their cost, ingredients, nutrition level, availability would have been presented in order to make the arguments more stronger. The impact of change on customers numbers and profit percentages should have been specified to conclude the passage appropriately and justifiably.
Sentence: Author has assumed that either customers are unaware of the difference in the taste or they may be treating both as same.
Description: The token that is not usually followed by a conjunction, coordinating
Suggestion: Refer to that and either
Sentence: There can be another reasons like may be margarine is more nutritious than butter, or less expensive than the butter that's why customers didn't complain.
Description: A determiner/pronoun, singular is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to another and reasons
Sentence: The impact of change on customers numbers and profit percentages should have been specified to conclude the passage appropriately and justifiably.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, plural, common
Suggestion: Refer to customers and numbers
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