77. The most effective way to understand contemporary culture is to analyze the trends of its youth.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The world is changing and keep making unprecedented outcomes. As a result, contemporary culture is under constant transformation. To understand contemporary culture spread throughout a system, some people contend that we should examine what young people want and what they possess in their lives. Although there are several weakness in the argument, I believe people can descry meaningful findings while exploring the young culture.
Admittedly, young people are immature in their decision making. It is possible that premature people tend to make inappropriate decision based on what other people believe and choose. Furthermore, youngsters are indecisive to hold a single system since their inclination is ephemeral. Therefore it would be hard to capture modern culture among young people or it cannot be appropriate due to their immaturity and indecisiveness.
Nevertheless, we can find meaningful definition of modern culture while examining the young culture. As mentioned above, young people are highly susceptible to other peers. This can contribute to forming peer-pressure expediting young people to accept state-of-art culture. In early 2000, for instance, cellphones were released in more accessible price and design. Even though young students have little reason to buy the cell phone compared to working adults, young students badger their parents to buy one. Soon the phenomena possessing a cell phone became normal among many people as well as young people. Especially, a true obsession to I-Phone among young people is triggered by some who expected a device which combined a music streaming technique and an access to Internet. And we all acknowledge that this device became a true competition between many companies who produce Smartphones.
In addition, young people literally lead the culture in their social networking system. In Facebook or Instagram, representative SNS applications, some big-users take the primary positions as trend leaders and they are in most cases, young people. Consequently, huge companies in specific fields such as food, diet, exercise, electric devices, and cosmetic companies try to provide their products to the big users since the big users have enormous influence in young people, also known as active consumers. It is well-known that people who have many subscribers in their SNS can get as many as products from companies who what the owner of the SNS to leave a positive comment to their product. Therefore we can conclude that corporations spend money on those moguls who have many young followers already know that young people take the lead to make a modern culture.
In sum, young people are the representative of modern culture. In spite of their immature feature and tendency to follow other people recklessly, young people are keen to follow the new issues and items and they have featured role in making cultural atmosphere through social network environments. Therefore it can be effective to take a closer look at young people to grasp the modern culture of a society.
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released in more accessible price and design.
released in a more accessible price and design.
Sentence: Even though young students have little reason to buy the cell phone compared to working adults, young students badger their parents to buy one.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to students and badger
flaws:
If you agree with the statement, then it needs to prove it is 'The most effective way'. and it needs some comparisons.
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Position: It is more or less true to say that contemporary culture is dominated by youth culture.
A. We live in an age when old people are marginalized in society.
B. What we call mass culture produced by the mass media is, as a matter of fact, a reflection of the trends among the youth.
C. There is urgent need for the younger generation and the older generation to understand each other and to build a more balanced contemporary culture.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 24 15
No. of Words: 476 350
No. of Characters: 2509 1500
No. of Different Words: 247 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.671 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.271 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.804 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 198 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 136 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 101 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 67 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 19.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.91 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.542 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.342 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.507 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.138 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 317, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun weakness seems to be countable; consider using: 'several weaknesses'.
Suggestion: several weaknesses
...sess in their lives. Although there are several weakness in the argument, I believe people can d...
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Line 2, column 286, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...m since their inclination is ephemeral. Therefore it would be hard to capture modern cult...
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Line 3, column 759, Rule ID: A_UNCOUNTABLE[1]
Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'access'.
Suggestion: access
...ombined a music streaming technique and an access to Internet. And we all acknowledge tha...
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Line 4, column 695, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...ve a positive comment to their product. Therefore we can conclude that corporations spend...
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Line 5, column 299, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Therefore,
...re through social network environments. Therefore it can be effective to take a closer lo...
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Discourse Markers used:
['also', 'but', 'consequently', 'furthermore', 'if', 'look', 'nevertheless', 'so', 'therefore', 'well', 'while', 'for instance', 'in addition', 'such as', 'as a result', 'as well as', 'in most cases', 'in spite of']
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance in Part of Speech:
Nouns: 0.246183206107 0.240241500013 102% => OK
Verbs: 0.150763358779 0.157235817809 96% => OK
Adjectives: 0.150763358779 0.0880659088768 171% => OK
Adverbs: 0.0324427480916 0.0497285424764 65% => OK
Pronouns: 0.043893129771 0.0444667217837 99% => OK
Prepositions: 0.104961832061 0.12292977631 85% => OK
Participles: 0.0286259541985 0.0406280797675 70% => OK
Conjunctions: 2.8999146502 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Infinitives: 0.0419847328244 0.030933414821 136% => OK
Particles: 0.0 0.0016655270985 0% => OK
Determiners: 0.0706106870229 0.0997080785238 71% => OK
Modal_auxiliary: 0.0171755725191 0.0249443105267 69% => OK
WH_determiners: 0.0190839694656 0.0148568991511 128% => OK
Vocabulary words and sentences:
No of characters: 3041.0 2732.02544248 111% => OK
No of words: 476.0 452.878318584 105% => OK
Chars per words: 6.38865546218 6.0361032391 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.58838876751 102% => OK
words length more than 5 chars: 0.424369747899 0.366273622748 116% => OK
words length more than 6 chars: 0.306722689076 0.280924506359 109% => OK
words length more than 7 chars: 0.228991596639 0.200843997647 114% => OK
words length more than 8 chars: 0.153361344538 0.132149295362 116% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8999146502 2.79330140395 104% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 219.290929204 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.516806722689 0.48968727796 106% => OK
Word variations: 60.6174402844 55.4138127331 109% => OK
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6194690265 116% => OK
Sentence length: 19.8333333333 23.380412469 85% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.0343769915 59.4972553346 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.708333333 141.124799967 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8333333333 23.380412469 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 0.75 0.674092028746 111% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.94800884956 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.21349557522 96% => OK
Readability: 50.5056022409 51.4728631049 98% => OK
Elegance: 1.67226890756 1.64882698954 101% => OK
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321142384057 0.391690518653 82% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence: 0.108251089248 0.123202303941 88% => OK
Sentence sentence coherence SD: 0.0719718369574 0.077325440228 93% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence: 0.489450979416 0.547984918172 89% => OK
Sentence paragraph coherence SD: 0.136911928955 0.149214159877 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12802462304 0.161403998019 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596130793224 0.0892212321368 67% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence: 0.382561416566 0.385218514788 99% => OK
Paragraph paragraph coherence SD: 0.0678942669462 0.0692045440612 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232086529579 0.275328986314 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0595872734635 0.0653680567796 91% => OK
Task Achievement:
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.4325221239 86% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.30420353982 75% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88274336283 225% => Less neutral sentences wanted.
Positive topic words: 8.0 7.22455752212 111% => OK
Negative topic words: 3.0 3.66592920354 82% => OK
Neutral topic words: 9.0 2.70907079646 332% => OK
Total topic words: 20.0 13.5995575221 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
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Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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