The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

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"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."

Cooperation is always a key factor to the harmony. More or less the cooperation is maintained in any organization; trimph of the organization is always on the way.The given prompt has stated that society should prepare its populations for leadership in different oragnization by inculcating sense of coperation but not by instilling sense of competition. This prompt is completely supported by me which is explained by the two reasons below.

Their is a common belief that competition is always the main boost for a person or things to excel in any field. However, This is not always true. The feeling of harmony and cooperation had always been better than the competition. Had the competion would be unhelathy, it would always leads to the disaster. For, instance there had always been competiton among USA and china and other communist country for every sector: economy, power, ets. This competion has always brought the both country to the ruining or downfalll stage, leading to the devastating war.
The leadership can also get hamper if there will be competition among two of them.

For instance, The competition among the two rivalry parties of the nepal i.e.had always lead to the incompetent leader in country. The dexterous one is always being deprived who can lead and bring the counry to the betterment. Such competition between parties for throne are also leading to excelling corruption. As, they belief that every time one party come to government; think that its time of them to earn as much as possible and leads to waning corruption which will be ultimately ruining the country. So, harmony is the best for the better leadership and betterment of the country.

similarly, In any coopearte world such as industry, big companies the leadership can be better through cooperation but not through competition. For instance, if a company will had competitve feeling but not forthcoming than one person start to compete with another person and try to excel him. In doing so, he may use his complete skill but he will try finish his work in a hasty manner which can ultimaley affect on the accuracy. So, cooperation is the best tool for better leadership.
Instilling of the cooperation among the young will make them better in listening to others. If a worker will listen to other crew member than he can know the perspective of the varying person and using skill of all the peason can do better for company as wll as for him also.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...do better for company as wll as for him also.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, similarly, so, still, as for, for instance, such as, more or less

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 12.4196629213 129% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 58.6224719101 84% => OK
Nominalization: 27.0 12.9106741573 209% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2042.0 2235.4752809 91% => OK
No of words: 413.0 442.535393258 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94430992736 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7665109809 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 215.323595506 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481840193705 0.4932671777 98% => OK
syllable_count: 627.3 704.065955056 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 58.2592532528 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 97.2380952381 118.986275619 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.6666666667 23.4991977007 84% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286742873041 0.243740707755 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0878324399876 0.0831039109588 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0833556070986 0.0758088955206 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.150465211329 0.150359130593 100% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0433285154056 0.0667264976115 65% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.37 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.71 8.38706741573 92% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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