"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis

This topic raises the controversial issue of whether it is good to educate young people for leadership by focussing on a proper sense of cooperation rather than competition. Indisputably, cooperation is an important asset for leadern in all fields to foster teamwork throughout different departments in an institution. Nevertheless, competition brings young potential leaders to go the extra mile in terms of efficient and diligent work and shows who actually brings the competences to lead numerous employees. Hence, I generally disagree with the statement made and would argue that it is important to focus on cooperation, but not on a bigger extent than competition.

First, competition motivates people to work harder in order to stand out of the crowd. Since leaders have to be prepared for long shifts, serve as a role model for other workers underneath them and connect ideas with a bright and logical thinking, it is crucial that they know how to deal with situations of high pressure. I would like to point out that these assets get taught in a society where competition shows who is ought to be a good leader. To illustrate, for instance an example of a highly competitive leadership university program show who can work harder on their own to achieve better grades and organize themselves the best. Competition between the students let a person working the most or showing the best results stand out and prove to be a good role model and leader. Therefore, I generally disagree that competition should not be treated with a lower imporatnce than cooperation.

Secondly, competition within a society lowers the risk for free-riders to show that they could be good leaders. In group work, the tasks are usually not distributed evenly since the people have different standards when it comes to working times and time-investment into a project. Since it is hard to evaluate every person individually after a team has submitted their results, the grades are often biased by an unbalance of working time. As an example, people who are participating in NGOs or other institutions focussing on the society's welfare can provide a wrong signalling. This can happen by showing all participants of a group in the same way, without any insight who could be the most competent person for a future job in a leading position. Thus, I think that competition let's the risk of free-rider issues plunge to better evaluate who is the most hard working person and has the best odds to be a good role model and leader.

Admittidly, a sense of coopeation is important for leaders as well. They have to make sure that, for instance, different specialized departments in a company work together smoothly to achieve more efficient results and have good relationships with other leaders, from other parties, to get them partnering with his or her company. However, competition is at least as crucial as cooperation when it comes to the preparation of young people to become leaders since it has to be sure who is actually equipped witht he competences to make a good leader, or who just is good in free-riding or is not able to work extra hours to serve as a proper role model within the institution he or she is working at.

In conclusion, a sense of competition and cooperation is important for leaders to learn from the society before they start in their job. Both have a different role in what they show in a good leader, like if he can go the extra mile or whether he can connect different groups to work efficiently together, and are important in different situation. Thus, I generally disagree with the statement that one asset is more imp

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, however, if, nevertheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, thus, well, as to, at least, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in the same way

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.3162921348 168% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 96.0 58.6224719101 164% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3026.0 2235.4752809 135% => OK
No of words: 616.0 442.535393258 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91233766234 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.98190197535 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90824104875 2.79657885939 104% => OK
Unique words: 267.0 215.323595506 124% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433441558442 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 949.5 704.065955056 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.38483146067 205% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 65.196651032 60.3974514979 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.545454545 118.986275619 116% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0 23.4991977007 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.77272727273 5.21951772744 149% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.131054882195 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0486243396474 0.0831039109588 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0385828952923 0.0758088955206 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0864054187779 0.150359130593 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0316333280908 0.0667264976115 47% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 14.1392134831 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.2 8.38706741573 98% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.5 11.8971910112 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 11.7820224719 136% => OK
What are above readability scores?


Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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