The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The issue states the best way to prepare young minds for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them the sense of co-operation and not competition. In my opinion, in order to excel in any field we need to have both the qualities - co-operation and competition, only then will we be a able to fight all odds and reach our goal.
Suppose, we imbibe the young people only the quality of co-operation, then they will not have the urge to do better. There is no factor the encourages them, motivates them and boosts them to reach higher. For example, in a office with two people working on a project, where one person is competent to solve the problems while the other either lacks the know-how or is just lethargic. Then in such a situation if the smart guy choose to do the job, taking the workload of both all by himself, then it is fair to take the credit all by himself so that the other guy gets a chance to improve himself rather than showing the sense of co-operation and letting him be the same in the future.
If we consider the other scenario where young people are instilled with only the attitude to compete with others, then again it becomes difficult. There are situations where it is necessary to work as a team in order to complete a given task. Suppose in the same office example, where the two guys working on a project are focused only on competing with each other and are in a race to finish the task all by themselves and take the credit, then they might not be able to complete the given task. In such situations, it is necessary for them to work together, co-operate among themselves and share the task assigned to complete it.
Thus, in order to prepare young minds to work in government, industry or any other field it is necessary to instill in them both the sense of co-operation and competition. They need to have a balance of both the qualities and decide what would be the right action to take according to the situation they are in.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...n and competition, only then will we be a able to fight all odds and reach our go...
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Suggestion: an
...s them to reach higher. For example, in a office with two people working on a pro...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...se to do the job, taking the workload of both all by himself, then it is fair to ...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ask. Suppose in the same office example, where the two guys working on a project ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, still, then, thus, while, for example, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 29.0 33.0505617978 88% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 2235.4752809 73% => OK
No of words: 364.0 442.535393258 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.49450549451 5.05705443957 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.54510668225 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 215.323595506 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.445054945055 0.4932671777 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 522.9 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.2370786517 59% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 59.6118812729 60.3974514979 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 136.333333333 118.986275619 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.3333333333 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.21951772744 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.271104960646 0.243740707755 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119820106241 0.0831039109588 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151050112551 0.0758088955206 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188995630559 0.150359130593 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0874702490287 0.0667264976115 131% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.9 14.1392134831 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.95 48.8420337079 119% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.1743820225 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.38706741573 91% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 100.480337079 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.7820224719 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.