"The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition."
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Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
The society is made up of a diverse set of people, each with a different kind of personality, different goals, often conflicting in nature. Achieving growth and success in a society with such varied and opposing interests necessitates a leadership which can achieve synergy through mutual cooperation. Thus instilling a sense of cooperation in young people is essential to prepare them for future leadership. However, competition is an essential motivator which encourages people to perform at their best, so some degree of healthy competition is also necessary for any leadership.
Growth of a nation requires multiple cogs to work in tandem, to achieve a common goal. And such commonness of action necessitates cooperation. Take for example, a company with a sales department and a product designing department. The people in sales department might want to focus on attracting more customers which would imply lower prices, but the designing department might stress on good quality and reliability of the product which would be difficult to attain given low prices. In order for the company, to grow therefore the department need to reach a mutual solution, that is directed towards achieving succcess for the company.
However, it is people who form the government, run the company, and they do have personal goals. And just focusing on cooperation might not result in favorable outcomes or any outcome for that matter. As, cooperation does not guarantee a solution. In order to prepare leaders for such situations, it is also required that they should be made aware of, and subjected to healthy competition. A good leader is one who could introduce healthy competition in scenarios where cooperation fails, and achieve required results.
Another point to be kept in mind is that absence of a sense of competition among youngsters, could prove counterproductive. As it could result in absence of initiative or unwillingness to stick up for what you believe to be right in order to achieve cooperation. Thus making them incompetent leaders. It is their personal goals, belief in themselves and their ideas that make a leader succesful. Thus, healthy competition is necessary to nurture a good, self assured and motivated leader.
In conclusion, excessive competition therefore has a potential to kill desire for cooperation, but a healthy competition can help us embrace cooperation. So, while cooperation is one of the primary requirements of good leadership, youngsters should also be subjected to some degree of healthy competition to prepare them for leadership.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...utcomes or any outcome for that matter. As, cooperation does not guarantee a solut...
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...uld prove counterproductive. As it could result in absence of initiative or unwil...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, still, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.3162921348 106% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 33.0505617978 61% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 58.6224719101 99% => OK
Nominalization: 29.0 12.9106741573 225% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 2235.4752809 97% => OK
No of words: 407.0 442.535393258 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.35380835381 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12390639728 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503685503686 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 684.0 704.065955056 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.0947993145 60.3974514979 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.761904762 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.380952381 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47619047619 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.218806217981 0.243740707755 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0628361600416 0.0831039109588 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0629910875745 0.0758088955206 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.123485850422 0.150359130593 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0578921288277 0.0667264976115 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.38706741573 102% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 100.480337079 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.