The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
The issue is whether or not societies should instill sense of cooperation or competition in young people to prepare them for leadership in government, industry, or other fields. In my opinion,a society should instill a sense of cooperation in its young people for leadeship role be it in government, industry or other fields for two reasons.
To begin, it is totally impossible for one man cannot work in silo, to achieve a good result on any task or project, contributions from other colleagues is essential; it is not uncommon that the grading system in schools today are based on competition and prizes are awarded on this basis. However, is this the best way to educate a child on how to become a leader? No. Enlightenin a child on the benefits of working in cooperation with other classmates would help the child learn how to relate with colleagues at work in the nearest future.
In addition, a child trained to compete will have challenges socializing with peers. For example: How possible is it for a Bank Manager that grew up in competitive environment to effectively subordinates without knowledge relationship management? Such Manager would constantly have facass with his team members not because of his bad character but because of social disconnection. Without emotional intelligence, it would be difficult for to relate with peers.
On the contrary, it is arguable that team work encourages complacency as some team mates shy away from their job functions and leave it for others to complete, however, with the invent of a scorecard approach of measuring individual effectiveness, this can be curtailed.
In conclusion, a society will produce more productive leaders if cooperation rather than competition is incorporated in our society as this would reduce ineffectiveness of dictatorial leaders, improve bottom line of industries and lead to a boom in Economic growth.
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but, however, if, so, still, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in my opinion, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.3162921348 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 58.6224719101 89% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1600.0 2235.4752809 72% => OK
No of words: 306.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22875816993 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18244613648 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.12123496974 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 215.323595506 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.565359477124 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 504.9 704.065955056 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.5223584366 60.3974514979 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 145.454545455 118.986275619 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8181818182 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.09090909091 5.21951772744 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.319583643599 0.243740707755 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126301595486 0.0831039109588 152% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.165479401079 0.0758088955206 218% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167324703314 0.150359130593 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.203603341416 0.0667264976115 305% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.1 14.1392134831 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.1639044944 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.67 8.38706741573 115% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 100.480337079 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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