The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Society today is trending away from the competitive spirit. Elementary schools no longer give children's sports teams first prizes; rather, everyone receives a participation prize. While cooperation is key to successful governments and businesses, I aruge that competition is necessary for creating leaders who can stand their ground. Furthermore, without competition, the drive to innovate is dampened.
I argue that competition creates confidence. One needs to have a sense that they deserve their spot in society and furthermore, whether true or not, that they deserve it more than the next person. This quality is necessary, in particular for government leaders, who need to be strong and confident in order to protect the wellbeing of the people for whom they serve. Cooperation can sometimes be valued as weak and be taken advantage of. For example, a local government official may concede the wishes of their constituents in an effort to cooperate with their neighboring municipalities. I believe that competitiveness, in particular in the area of government, is necessary in order for elected officials to be stallwart in the promises made to their constituents.
The competitive nature in humans is what keeps us from being complacent. It is what compels us to continually innovate and do better. I argue that this trait is neccessary in world leaders in government, industry, and other fields. For example, let's look at the race to space event that occured in the 1950's and 60's. Had Russia and the USA not been competitive against each other, had they not had the desire to be the first to the moon, it may have taken decades longer to invent the new groundbreaking space technology. Instead these technologies and major advacements in space exploration and engineering occured in a matter of a few years - all drive by competition. Therefore, competion keeps the world inventing new technologies in a faster and more positive direction.
Although competition is necessary for leaders, as I have illustrated above, the need for cooperation can not be completely overlooked. As a leader, one cannot simply ignore the ideas and arguments from their competitors with the attitude of "I'm better than you". Bipartisanship is a pillar in government and industry. Referring back to the example of the race to space, although competition drove the effort, had their not been internal cooperation instilled by the leaders of the project to everyone involved, from the higher ups to the lowest person on the rung, the program would have completely failed.
While cooperation and bipartisanship is necessary between leaders of government, industry, and other areas, I argue that competition holds an even higher value. Competition drives innovation and breads confidence - two important qaulities for leaders today.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Instead,
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, look, may, so, still, therefore, well, while, for example, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 33.0505617978 103% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 26.0 12.9106741573 201% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2388.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 446.0 442.535393258 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.35426008969 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.14426459962 2.79657885939 112% => OK
Unique words: 231.0 215.323595506 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517937219731 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 749.7 704.065955056 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.2370786517 114% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 56.7969220924 60.3974514979 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.826086957 118.986275619 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3913043478 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.0 5.21951772744 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168935408584 0.243740707755 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480264642028 0.0831039109588 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390668890309 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0992673289162 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0284074895734 0.0667264976115 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.75 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.97 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 124.0 100.480337079 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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