The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
People have different views about the qualities of a good leadership. While some of them believe that a good leader should be willing to cooperate and arrive at a consensus with the opposing party, others believe that the nature to compete with others is a paramount quality of a good leadership. The prompt suggests that we should inculcate a sense of coorporation in the minds of our young poeple to prepare them for leadership in various fields rather than competition. I feel that it depends on the field in which they choose to work would define the importance of either of the characteristics for the following reasons.
Firsly, let us consider the case of public service or a government official elected by the people. In such fields where our decision should be made based on various factors like - opinion of the people, opinions of other representatives, socio-economic factors, etc, it is the ability to cooperate with others that would aid in making the correct decision. Especially in the field of Politics, we will come across some people who ardently support a law while others want to oppose the law. One cannot disregad the opinions or concerns of the opposing party and implement a law foolhardily. Such actions would have detrimental ramifications that may not forsee. Such practice is against the very fundamentals of democracy which states that every voice should be heard. A leader who does not have consideration for opposing views cannot be considered as a good leader. Thus, in such situations, where dissenting voices should also be heard and taken into consideration, a leader can make a decision only when he is good at cooperating with the opposite party and arriving at a consesus. There may not be a solution that is appeases everyone in the society but a good leader can negotiate terms with various parties and arrive at a solution may be by mutual concession. Thus, in some fields, especially in politics, the ability to cooperate with others is more benign.
However, there are fields, especially related to cooperate sectors, where the proclivity for compition aids a company in moving forward. If it was not for competition, it is blatant that one would not see the technological advancments that we see today. For example, let us take example of technology. Steve Jobs always thought about how can they compete with the then tech gaints like IBM and HP. He was very adamant about what he wants his team to come up with so that they can supercede the existing tech gaints. His penchant for compition made him to take unprecedented risks which eventually paid off. And now if we look the company that he founded, Apple Inc, it is the most valuable company in the world. This would not have been possible if Steve Jobs didn't have the desire to compete with the spearheads.
Therefore, one should inculcate both the sense of cooperation as well as compitition into the minds of the young people simultaneously making them aware of advantages and disadvantages of each school of thought. This will equip them with enough knowledge and choose one over the other based on the field they choose to work in the future.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 6, column 761, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: didn't
...ld not have been possible if Steve Jobs didnt have the desire to compete with the spe...
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Line 8, column 63, Rule ID: BOTH_AS_WELL_AS[1]
Message: Probable usage error. Use 'and' after 'both'.
Suggestion: and
...inculcate both the sense of cooperation as well as compitition into the minds of the young...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, may, so, then, therefore, thus, well, while, for example, i feel, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.5258426966 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 22.0 12.4196629213 177% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 14.8657303371 81% => OK
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.3162921348 186% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 33.0505617978 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2623.0 2235.4752809 117% => OK
No of words: 535.0 442.535393258 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.90280373832 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.80937282943 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7977853546 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478504672897 0.4932671777 97% => OK
syllable_count: 828.0 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 6.24550561798 144% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.2943705334 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.291666667 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2916666667 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.41666666667 5.21951772744 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174012524277 0.243740707755 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0510400914107 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0443436294369 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.121999842436 0.150359130593 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0541693110412 0.0667264976115 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 14.1392134831 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.44 12.1639044944 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.38706741573 95% => OK
difficult_words: 111.0 100.480337079 110% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 11.8971910112 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 62.5 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.75 Out of 6
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