The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Good leaders are those who are inclusive and have good cooperative quality. Without cooperation, inclusiveness is almost impossibe to gain and without inclusiveness, a leader cannot be a good leader. Here, the writer contends that the best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. I mostly agree with the writer's assertion. However, I concede that the sense of competition is also important.
In the field of government leadership, co-peration has a cardinal importance. Government leadership is all about forming a common ground for those people who belongs different community, different culture, different religion, and different area etc. Cooperation among different parties, differnent ideology , different leaders, is itself a arduous task. When a society intalls a sense of cooperation in young people, they knows the importace of co-operation and act accordingly, as a result, they can find a common ground for different people. For example , in a election, when none of the parties gets majority, they have to make a collision in order to form a government. Only when those leader, who have good cooperative skill, they can form and run the government in a smooth way, otherwise it wouldn't be possibe to form a government and even if the government is formed, it cannot go far away.
In the case of, industry, research and other fields, the sense of competition is also very important. However, the competition should be in a positive way. In the case of of industry, when there is a sense of competition to produce good quality on their production, it trigger leader to be more focused and more laborious in their task. Which results in positive outcome
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...ot competition. I mostly agree with the writers assertion. However, I concede that the ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
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...g different parties, differnent ideology , different leaders, is itself a arduous ...
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Suggestion: an
...ideology , different leaders, is itself a arduous task. When a society intalls a ...
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'know'
Suggestion: know
...se of cooperation in young people, they knows the importace of co-operation and act a...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...ground for different people. For example , in a election, when none of the parties...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
... for different people. For example , in a election, when none of the parties gets...
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Message: Did you mean 'this leader' or 'those leaders'?
Suggestion: this leader; those leaders
...n order to form a government. Only when those leader, who have good cooperative skill, they ...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a smooth way" with adverb for "smooth"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...l, they can form and run the government in a smooth way, otherwise it wouldnt be possibe to for...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...overnment in a smooth way, otherwise it wouldnt be possibe to form a government and eve...
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Message: Consider replacing "in a positive way" with adverb for "positive"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...ant. However, the competition should be in a positive way. In the case of of industry, when there...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: of
...hould be in a positive way. In the case of of industry, when there is a sense of comp...
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Line 5, column 270, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'triggers', 'trigs'?
Suggestion: triggers; trigs
...ce good quality on their production, it trigger leader to be more focused and more labo...
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Message: “Which” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...cused and more laborious in their task. Which results in positive outcome
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, however, if, so, still, for example, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 22.0 12.9106741573 170% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1507.0 2235.4752809 67% => OK
No of words: 292.0 442.535393258 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16095890411 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13376432452 4.55969084622 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.07218935742 2.79657885939 110% => OK
Unique words: 153.0 215.323595506 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.52397260274 0.4932671777 106% => OK
syllable_count: 477.9 704.065955056 68% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 60.4797119335 60.3974514979 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.466666667 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4666666667 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46666666667 5.21951772744 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 3.0 4.97078651685 60% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.359937085862 0.243740707755 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107185895568 0.0831039109588 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.143960706289 0.0758088955206 190% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.225726255263 0.150359130593 150% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10219762947 0.0667264976115 153% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 14.1392134831 89% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 48.8420337079 107% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.1639044944 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.42 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 11.8971910112 59% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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