The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
People who become leaders should know how to protect the community they are ruling in, such as companies, governments and other fields. In order to do so, it is necessary for them to be well acknowledged with how to cooperate with other communities while being cautious with when to be competitive. I believe the most apposite way for societies to help prepare young people to become an effective leader is when they are erudite in being cooperative and competitive.
First of all, it is essential for leaders to easily blend in with other different communities. It has proven through history that a community cannot survive if it circumscribes the help from other communities. I would like to mention North Korea as an example. North Korea is known to be a very secluded nation, protecting only those they own and excluding all the other cultures and environment from other nations such as technology, entertainment, and political positions. At first, they seemed to flourish in their own ways because it enabled the laypersons in the nation to pursue their welfare due to economical and cultural bloom. However, as time fleetingly passed by, they hindered in advancing and developing technologies because they excluded themselves from conducting research with other much more advanced nations, which led to people's lives deteriorating. Because they did not accept the helps and suggestions of collaborations from other nations, they got sluggish and weren't able to advance into a better nation. If the leader of the North Korea had been flexible and accepted all the collaboration suggested from other nations, North Korea would have been able to advance their current sluggish technology.
Furthermore, the leader should always bear in mind that they could experience a slump. If so, it would be extremely difficult to ameliorate the problems and survive by themselves, they would have to receive assistance from the other communities. However, if the leader of a deteriorating community did not know how to collaborate and was selfish, none of the leaders from other communities would grant assistance. For a community to survive and prosper, the leader should be capable of collaborating with other leaders.
In addition, it is also consequential for leaders to know when to be competitive. Being contentious and sometimes surpassing other nations or communities could provide people a sort of pride and motivation. For example, World Cup is held annually, having soccer teams from each nation to compete with other teams. If the leader of the soccer team is not competitive, then they would falter and lose all the competitions, losing financial and emotional support, they would lose the motivation to continuously practicing their soccer skills. Eventually, there would be no young potential soccer players left in that nation and soccer would diminish. However, if the leader had been the opposite of tepid and was competitive, it would have constantly reminded the soccer players to be motivated and the soccer team could have won the World Cup. Even the people who watch the soccer games would feel pride and affection towards their nation, enabling them to work more arduously for their nation.
To sum up, due to the reasons mentioned above, I believe it is important for leaders to be well acknowledged with being both collaborative and competitive. The society should educate the young people who has the potential of becoming a leader of a community such as industries or government, to be capable of having both abilities, collaboration and competition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 841, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
...uch more advanced nations, which led to peoples lives deteriorating. Because they did n...
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Line 2, column 984, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: weren't
...om other nations, they got sluggish and werent able to advance into a better nation. I...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, furthermore, however, if, so, then, well, while, for example, in addition, sort of, such as, first of all, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 19.5258426966 149% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 12.4196629213 153% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 77.0 58.6224719101 131% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2999.0 2235.4752809 134% => OK
No of words: 576.0 442.535393258 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20659722222 5.05705443957 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89897948557 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95381385264 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 259.0 215.323595506 120% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.449652777778 0.4932671777 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 934.2 704.065955056 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 6.24550561798 224% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 23.0359550562 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4779005609 60.3974514979 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.958333333 118.986275619 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.4991977007 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.21951772744 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 10.2758426966 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120766547614 0.243740707755 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454043092985 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0397982341346 0.0758088955206 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0823982889469 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0395548257139 0.0667264976115 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.1 14.1392134831 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.8420337079 96% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.1743820225 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.1639044944 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.45 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 132.0 100.480337079 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.2143820225 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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