The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree wi

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The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.

I agree with the statement that the young people should cooperate in government. However, there is till some field need a sense of competition.
Some people may argue that the best leader is the winner of the competition.The person who lead the field must be the one who win the first place.It is possible that with the competition people will be more aggressive and the feeling of eager to win can bring creative result.I believe in some field the competition is a positive way for young people for leadership.For example, the business owners need the competition between young people in the trading company, because market is changing rapidly, and competition can press people to complete a project in a very short time.
However, a sense of competition is not always a positive way for a group of people, especially for people in government.Government should make a long term policy.Every law and every regulation is cardinal to citizens.It needs opinions from all over the country.We need to be more careful of the citizens' welfare and health.For example, people are suffering COVID-19 in Taiwan, the government should cooperation to fight with the deadly virus.
In addition, there are many departments in a government, there is no need for them to have a sense of competition.It is efficient to cooperate between departments in a government.Competition may waste the energy and cash when people do not believe in each other in the system of a government.
In conclusion,I totally agree that a society to prepare its young people for leadership in industry is by instilling in them a sense of competition.However, the senesce of competition do not work in the field of government.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, may, so, still, for example, in addition, in conclusion, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 33.0505617978 42% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 23.0 12.9106741573 178% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1413.0 2235.4752809 63% => OK
No of words: 279.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06451612903 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.08696624509 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.38019246622 2.79657885939 121% => OK
Unique words: 136.0 215.323595506 63% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.487455197133 0.4932671777 99% => OK
syllable_count: 449.1 704.065955056 64% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 6.24550561798 112% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 20.2370786517 30% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 46.0 23.0359550562 200% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 185.019593557 60.3974514979 306% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 235.5 118.986275619 198% => OK
Words per sentence: 46.5 23.4991977007 198% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.1666666667 5.21951772744 291% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 14.0 7.80617977528 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 10.2758426966 29% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.83258426966 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.341200129531 0.243740707755 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.18759036619 0.0831039109588 226% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0943059316172 0.0758088955206 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213328504573 0.150359130593 142% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0840054328878 0.0667264976115 126% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 25.7 14.1392134831 182% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 24.79 48.8420337079 51% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 21.2 12.1743820225 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.96 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.09 8.38706741573 108% => OK
difficult_words: 56.0 100.480337079 56% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 20.4 11.2143820225 182% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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