A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise Currently the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away thus the proposed new jazz club in Monroe the C Note would have the local market all to itself Plus jazz is extremely popular in Mon

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A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer; several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe; and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every week night at 7 P.M. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment. We therefore predict that the C Note cannot help but make money.

In a statement, it is stated that author predict the C Note can eventually make money.Although at first glance, the author's recommendation appear to be somewhat convincing, but further reflection reveals that it is based on three unwarranted assumptions.

To begin with, the author's claim relies on the assumption that people attended Monroe’s jazz festival last summer will still attend next tear.However, this assumption is unwarranted because things rarely remain the same over extended period of time.The fact that happened last year is not a sound evidence to draw a conclusion that 100,000 people will still come for the jazz festival.It is possible that people will not attend the jazz festival because of the COVID-19.For example, the jazz festival may be canceled because of the COVID-19 and the jazz club need to pay the bill of rent and also salary of the musicians, which may make the club facing bankruptcy. As a result, one year data can not make a perfect conclusion.

Furthermore, the conclusion also relies on the unstated assumption that several well-known jazz musicians who lived in Monroe can make C Note profitable.There is no evidence for the assumption.We can not assume that well-known jazz musicians is the essence reason of the profit.It is truth that fans will be attracted by the well-known jazz musicians, but it does not mean that they will pay for the C Note club.It is important to know that are they famous enough to lea d the jazz economic.The author need to strengthen the assumption.

Additionally, the author said that there is no jazz club in the area, and it assume that the new jazz club can have the local market all to itself.Here is the assumption that the they have found a business opportunity that on one else has noticed.However, it is also likely that there are some reasons that the investors decide not to open a jazz club here.Maybe the crime rate in the area is high, and no one will wander around here in the late evening.Maybe customers would rather drive a long way to the jazz club 65 miles away because that jazz club is so awesome with a superb atmosphere, so no jazz club can survive 100 miles in its radius.

In conclusion, the author's recommendation as it stands now is full of flaws due to its reliance on unwarranted assumptions. If the author is able to provide more reliable data for the above assumptions and offer more evidence , then it will be possible to fully evaluate the viability of the proposed recommendation.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, so, still, then, well, for example, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 22.0 19.6327345309 112% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 13.6137724551 147% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 28.8173652695 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2075.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 425.0 441.139720559 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88235294118 5.12650576532 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.54043259262 4.56307096286 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95314214241 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 204.123752495 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.48 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 705.55239521 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 7.0 19.7664670659 35% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 60.0 22.8473053892 263% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 236.507582827 57.8364921388 409% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 296.428571429 119.503703932 248% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 60.7142857143 23.324526521 260% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 18.0 5.70786347227 315% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 21.0 5.25449101796 400% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 6.88822355289 15% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.360681303997 0.218282227539 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125388551074 0.0743258471296 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.145268051138 0.0701772020484 207% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.172627579505 0.128457276422 134% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145097902301 0.0628817314937 231% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 31.9 14.3799401198 222% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 19.04 48.3550499002 39% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 25.5 12.197005988 209% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.7 8.32208582834 117% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 98.500998004 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 28.5 12.3882235529 230% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 26.0 11.1389221557 233% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 26.0 11.9071856287 218% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 16 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 6 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 439 350
No. of Characters: 2022 1500
No. of Different Words: 202 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.577 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.606 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.563 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 129 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 90 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 70 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 42 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 43.9 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 31.342 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.9 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.4 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.698 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.096 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5