A jazz music club in Monroe would be a tremendously profitable enterprise. Currently, the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away; thus, the proposed new jazz club in Monroe, the C-Note, would have the local market all to itself. Plus, jazz is extremely popular in Monroe: over 100,000 people attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer; several well-known jazz musicians live in Monroe; and the highest-rated radio program in Monroe is 'Jazz Nightly,' which airs every weeknight at 7 P.M. Finally, a nationwide study indicates that the typical jazz fan spends close to $1,000 per year on jazz entertainment
A group of developers in the city of Monroe, while writing for a small business loan claim that constructing a jazz club in Monroe would be lucrative and will turn out to be a successful business. The author justifies his claim by stating that the nearest jazz is 65 miles and as most of the people in Monroe are jazz lovers and even many jazz artists reside in Monroe. He also states that on average people spend 1000$ per year on jazz entertainment. He also mentions the for an annual jazz festival in Monroe 100000 people attended. The argument as it present is flawed due to a lack of specific evidence and many unwarranted assumptions. In order to full evaluate the merit of the argument, the following evidence needs to present
To begin, the developers state that the nearest jazz club is 65 miles away from Monroe, and if a new jazz club in Monroe would attract all the local residents to the new clib. The author naively assumes that the new jazz club will be successful just because it is nearest to the local residents. First of all, the developers never mentioned that the local residents of Monroe, travel to the jazz club that is 65 miles away nor did the developer mention that the jazz club that is 65 miles away is successful. Even if we assume the people of Monroe go to the jazz which is 65 miles away, maybe they go there because it offers more than the jazz and has a variety of services only that jazz club possess. It can also be the case that people go there for other tourist attractions and visit the jazz club that is 65 miles away just for the purpose of visiting and not because they are interested in jazz or jazz club. Therefore, absence of evidence for all the above situations makes the argument weaker.
Moreover, the developers naively assume that people are interested in jazz and would visit their jazz club as jazz is extremely popular in Monroe, and about 100,000 people were present at Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer. The developers, in this case argue that all the above factors may lead to success of the new jazz club.What if, most of the 100,000 people who attended Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer were mostly outsiders and hardly any local person of Monroe attended the festival. Also, the time of the event can also have an impact on the attendance at Monroe's annual jazz festival last summer. Since it is summer, most of the local residents attended it as they have free time to kill but not because of a liking for jazz. If that is the case, and if the residents of Monroe were busy during other times of the year, the club may be flying colors in the summertime but it will be hard for the club to sustain itself during other time. Failure to consider all the above situations and inability to provide proofs for such situation makes the argument of the developers water under the bridge
In conclusion, the argument as it stands now is seriously flawed due to the absence of solid evidence or proofs to back the author's claims. If the author is able to provide proofs preferably in a systematic format, it may be possible to evaluate the soundness of the argument and determine if building a jazz club in Monroe city would be profitable or not
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Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 415, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$1000'.
Suggestion: $1000
...lso states that on average people spend 1000$ per year on jazz entertainment. He also...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 658, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nwarranted assumptions. In order to full evaluate the merit of the argument, the ...
^^
Line 5, column 334, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: What
...ay lead to success of the new jazz club.What if, most of the 100,000 people who atte...
^^^^
Line 5, column 882, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...r, the club may be flying colors in the summertime but it will be hard for the club to sus...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2644.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 580.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55862068966 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38830135309 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.384482758621 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 834.3 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.1144869564 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.888888889 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2222222222 23.324526521 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.524674759724 0.218282227539 240% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202995230307 0.0743258471296 273% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122742918 0.0701772020484 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338644336297 0.128457276422 264% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125964968234 0.0628817314937 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 415, Rule ID: CURRENCY[1]
Message: The currency mark is usually put at the beginning of the number: '$1000'.
Suggestion: $1000
...lso states that on average people spend 1000$ per year on jazz entertainment. He also...
^^^^^
Line 1, column 658, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...nwarranted assumptions. In order to full evaluate the merit of the argument, the ...
^^
Line 5, column 334, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: What
...ay lead to success of the new jazz club.What if, most of the 100,000 people who atte...
^^^^
Line 5, column 882, Rule ID: SUMMER_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...r, the club may be flying colors in the summertime but it will be hard for the club to sus...
^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, moreover, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 19.6327345309 143% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 12.9520958084 93% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 11.1786427146 179% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 13.6137724551 125% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 28.8173652695 118% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 55.5748502994 128% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2644.0 2260.96107784 117% => OK
No of words: 580.0 441.139720559 131% => OK
Chars per words: 4.55862068966 5.12650576532 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.90746259869 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38830135309 2.78398813304 86% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 204.123752495 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.384482758621 0.468620217663 82% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 834.3 705.55239521 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59920159681 88% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 19.7664670659 91% => OK
Sentence length: 32.0 22.8473053892 140% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 68.1144869564 57.8364921388 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.888888889 119.503703932 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 32.2222222222 23.324526521 138% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.77777777778 5.70786347227 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 8.20758483034 146% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 6.88822355289 73% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.524674759724 0.218282227539 240% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202995230307 0.0743258471296 273% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.122742918 0.0701772020484 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.338644336297 0.128457276422 264% => Maybe some contents are duplicated.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125964968234 0.0628817314937 200% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.92 48.3550499002 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.76 12.5979740519 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.73 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.8 11.1389221557 133% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.