The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation not competition

Essay topics:

The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.

A society is built on the strength and diversity of the people that it constitutes of. In so doing it is able to draw upon different forms of creativities and ideas to grow and accomplish outstanding endeavours. The best way for a society to prepare its young is imbibing in them a sense of togetherness and cooperation. I strongly support this motion that cooperation and not competition is the best approach to prepare the young people in a society for leadership in government, industry and other fields of life as outlined with the following two reasons.

Firstly, going by the definition of what leadership stands for and what a leader should represent, chiefly amongst it is the ability to bring together people of different ideaology, opinions and backgrounds to achieve set goals. For an individual to do this he or she must have as one of its strengths and characteristics a deep sense of cooperation, which allows the indiviual in a leadership position to accomodate different class of people irrespective of their background. A good example of this plays out in a country like United States of America which boasts of a wide range of diversity. A notable characteristics of all its past successful leadership in terms of its president is their ability to find a common ground in the face of conflicts thereby hearing out each side of the defence and finding solutions to arcane issues.

Secondly, life is not always about competition as it breeds strife and resentment among people. Instilling in young people a sense of competion will only lead to depression in the face of defeats, making them feel that they cannot amount to anything and in so doing they no longer look ahead to what the future holds for them as they are deeply fixtaed on the present. A deep sense of cooperation leads to accepting each other strengths and weaknesses and thereby helping each other out and achieving valuable goals.

Some people with different views might say competition sometimes brings the best in people and as a result outstanding individuals are being separated from the rest. This for me does not apply to leadership as it looks at individual qualities and not the ability to bring people together and bring about result. As the saying goes if you want to go fast go alone but if you want to go far go with other people because there are strength in numbers and this can only be achived through a deep seated sense of cooperation and togertherness as instilled from a young age in an individual.

Average: 5.8 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'consists of'?
Suggestion: consists of
...gth and diversity of the people that it constitutes of. In so doing it is able to draw upon di...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'characteristic'?
Suggestion: characteristic
...of a wide range of diversity. A notable characteristics of all its past successful leadership i...

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, second, secondly, so, still, as to, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 12.4196629213 48% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.3162921348 44% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 58.6224719101 130% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2082.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 431.0 442.535393258 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83062645012 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.55969084622 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.88665965769 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 215.323595506 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.498839907193 0.4932671777 101% => OK
syllable_count: 644.4 704.065955056 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.2370786517 69% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.2417110718 60.3974514979 110% => OK
Chars per sentence: 148.714285714 118.986275619 125% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.7857142857 23.4991977007 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.57142857143 5.21951772744 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.422523414439 0.243740707755 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.137320038249 0.0831039109588 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134878495239 0.0758088955206 178% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.2607700811 0.150359130593 173% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.146058848004 0.0667264976115 219% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 14.1392134831 118% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.33 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 100.480337079 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?

Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.

Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.