The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim

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The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position

The character of society is best judged by the ideology and character of its people. This ideology of people leads to them choosing their role models and heroes, whom they worship and try to exact them throughout their life. For instance, people of Rajasthan, especially Mewar have their ancestral kings like Maharana Pratap as their role model. It is evident from the percentage they make up in Indian army, that they are valorant enough to do justice to their role model.
But, this might not always be the case. For instance, children of countries like North Korea are not exposed to great people of other regions. North Korea is similar to what a black box is, completely unknown from the outside. People living outside their country does not have a clue about them, and people inside the country do not have any idea about the outer world. They are labeled by other people as tyrants, mostly because of their tyrannical kings, who are worshipped by the people. Children are taught of the greatness of their reigning kings and thus, due to lack of alternative to look at, they accept them as their role model. North Korean kings, especially Kim Jong Yu are known for their tyrannical behaviour, which is not evident in the behaviour of people. Therefore, the character of society should be judged only through their role models if they had knowledge of other alternative great personalities to make a choice from.
A country like India sets an example of a country which has given access to the people to study about the lifes of various eminent people and make a choice of their role model. For most of the people, Mahatma Gandhi, also the father of nation, is an idol. Mahatma Gandhi followed the principle of truth and non violence, and considered them as two of his greatest weapons. He also had an open mind when it came to religion. This seculiarism is visible in the streets of India, where people of different religion come together and complement each other in various tasks, be it politics or bureacracy which is not present in extremist countries like Pakistan who consider their role model people like Jinnah who believed in supremacy of Muslim people. This toxic mindset is reflected in their treatment of minority groups, who are kept away from basic necessities of living. Therefore, the statement given is valid in countries who have given its citizens freedom to choose their heroes.
The society of eighteenth century and nineteenth century is a perfect example of understanding the character of society. Most of the people in that era viewed people who supported patriarchy as their role models. As a result, from the evidences based on accounts of life of women, it is evident that women were circumscribed to house chores, while bulk of the outside work was to be done by men. However, as people started realizing the potential of women and started ideolizing women as their role models, the dignity of women in society increased by manifolds. Women started looking for jobs and by the advent of 21st centure, women were proficient and at par with the men. This transition of mindset from early 18th century to 21st century is also marked by change in the role models of people, which indicates a causal relation between the two.
Keeping in view the above examples and arguments, it is clear that charcater of society based on their role models should be judged only in democratic societies, where people are given the freedom to judge their heroes. Judging society without having knowledge about their backgrounds would yield incorrect judgements, leading to incorrect conculsions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'necessities'.
Suggestion: necessities
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for instance, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 19.5258426966 138% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 33.0505617978 133% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 98.0 58.6224719101 167% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2702.0 2235.4752809 121% => OK
No of words: 558.0 442.535393258 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.84229390681 5.05705443957 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.86024933743 4.55969084622 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.47550142307 2.79657885939 89% => OK
Unique words: 262.0 215.323595506 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.469534050179 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 851.4 704.065955056 121% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 6.24550561798 176% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.2370786517 124% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0961514343 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.08 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.32 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.6 5.21951772744 69% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.83258426966 207% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.162281460561 0.243740707755 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0531440612523 0.0831039109588 64% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0675255735337 0.0758088955206 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.115410014409 0.150359130593 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.050930793505 0.0667264976115 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 14.1392134831 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.09 12.1639044944 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 130.0 100.480337079 129% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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