The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
Ones who are crowned as the heroes of society are expected to sacrifice themselves for society. The prompt states that the best way to understand society’s characteristics is to examine the men and women that society has chosen to be their heroes or role models. In my opinion, the character of a society can only be judged by the people in it and in this case, strongly disagree for the following reasons.
Firstly, who is considered a hero or role model in society? One who abides by the rules set by the constitution of that society has set and follows them to the T, or One who performs strenuous tasks in a particular field and is renowned for their expertise in that field. For instance, an individual who excels in the medicinal field and performs multiple operations, and is revered for their knowledge in the medicinal field, but this individual is blamed for an accident during one of his operations. Still, it was due to a technical fault of the oxygen cylinder. However, If the above case stands true then the prompt does not hold water.
Secondly, when there is a role model in society the people generally tend to be like the role model as role models are people's target of admiration. For instance, the role model of society appears to society as a gentleman or a gentlewoman at the same time he is not the same when he is in a private situation. However, the people who admire them, especially the younger generation who do not know the difference in good and evil easily believe in the ideologies of their role model and follow the fake persona that the role model portrays when he is with the people. If the above situation stands true then the society which is shaped by his fake persona is different from the role model of that society.
Of course, some may argue that the society’s character is shaped by their role models or heroes, but it is the case only when the society truly idealizes their heroes or role models or when both the ideologies of the society and their role models match completely only then does the prompt hold water.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 569, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “If” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, for instance, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.3162921348 177% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 33.0505617978 85% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 58.6224719101 73% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1706.0 2235.4752809 76% => OK
No of words: 369.0 442.535393258 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62330623306 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38284983912 4.55969084622 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55856125709 2.79657885939 91% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 215.323595506 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433604336043 0.4932671777 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 558.0 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 6.24550561798 16% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 20.2370786517 64% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 73.0485774985 60.3974514979 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.230769231 118.986275619 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.3846153846 23.4991977007 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.61538461538 5.21951772744 165% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 10.2758426966 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.250449715494 0.243740707755 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106369497637 0.0831039109588 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0852171850159 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17424527527 0.150359130593 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0782782262757 0.0667264976115 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 48.8420337079 105% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.81 12.1639044944 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.38706741573 96% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 100.480337079 71% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.7820224719 110% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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