The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character
of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the
claim. In developing and supporting your position, be sure to address the most
compelling reasons and/or examples that could be used to challenge your position.
It is demonstrated that people exhibit the behavior of a character whose footsteps they walk in. The prompt claims the plausibility of emulating an idol figure. In my opinion, I strongly agree with this suggestion and argue that a society reflects the behavior of whom they idolize for two reasons.
To begin, a group of persons exhibiting high moral standard can't possibly imitate an exemplar whose moral standard is lower than theirs. For instance, the late historian musician, Fela Anikulapo Kutu, who is a role model to many in and outside the music industry is however emulated by secular musicians and artists who believes smoking, drinking, and womanizing is the right way of life because, that is typically how Fela lived his life. Also, his well-known shrine is populated by drug addicts, youths and adults with a very bad drinking, smoking and womanizing habit. Fela Anikulapo died of Acquired Immunodeficiency syndrome and still has so many who adores and walks in his destructive footsteps. The example above illustrates that a society whose role model is a drug addict would definitely be populated by people of the same mien.
Further, even if characters of people can't be determined by studying the behaviour of those they imitate, it is however important for a body to carefully choose an estimated character to emulate for the purpose of walking the right steps. For example, students whose role model is a respected Neurosurgeon would definitely walk in his ways to be, if not exactly like him. They would definitely read his books, follow every advice he gives, adopt his style of reading and approaching challenges, imitate his method of selecting friends and gatherings. When eventually successful, would be an exact replica of this particular neurosurgeon whom they adore. Just like most successful doctors and neurosurgeons would definitely point out the famous Ben Carson as their model figure.
Of course, some would argue that a community observed with a good character would not necessarily have the best behaved model. It is however impossible that a well behaved doctor would emulate a drug addict. This validates the adage that says "show me your friend, I would tell you who you are". It is therefore easy to assess a community's moral standard by assessing it's highly esteemed model figures.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 61, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... persons exhibiting high moral standard cant possibly imitate an exemplar whose mora...
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Line 3, column 225, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun in seems to be countable; consider using: 'many ins'.
Suggestion: many ins
... Anikulapo Kutu, who is a role model to many in and outside the music industry is howev...
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Line 5, column 39, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
... Further, even if characters of people cant be determined by studying the behaviour...
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Line 5, column 592, Rule ID: EXACT_REPLICA[1]
Message: Use simply 'replica'
Suggestion: replica
...When eventually successful, would be an exact replica of this particular neurosurgeon whom th...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, however, if, so, still, therefore, well, for example, for instance, of course, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.5258426966 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 14.8657303371 74% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1961.0 2235.4752809 88% => OK
No of words: 381.0 442.535393258 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.1469816273 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80088036177 2.79657885939 100% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 215.323595506 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.569553805774 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 639.0 704.065955056 91% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.210183909 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.352941176 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4117647059 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.21951772744 110% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140651894199 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.044169623401 0.0831039109588 53% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0369934082729 0.0758088955206 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0885171122621 0.150359130593 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.030282134261 0.0667264976115 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 14.1392134831 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.8420337079 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.1743820225 108% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.49 8.38706741573 113% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 100.480337079 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.