Claim The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models Reason Heroes and role models reveal a society s highest ideals Write a response in whic

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Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

Everyone's definition of a hero is different, depending on different times, different educational level, cultural background and even family environment. he image of the hero exists as a kind of image that support to give people hope. Some people think that the best way to study a society is to study the character of people the country calls heroes. I agree with this view but it is not comprehensive.
There is no denying that studying the people who are called heroes in this country is a good way to learn about this society. First reason is like what I say before, hero is a image that makes people have hope for their live and make their inner world become more powerful. However, the hero have tiomeliness, which means people will have different image of hero in different of time. Study the characters of hero only can understand a specific time of a society but it is hard to understand all about this society.
Most of the time, the hero is an imaginary figure in people is the mental world rather than a specific person in people's lives. Most of the time, the hero should be perfect without any negative personality. For example, a hero's accepted standard is helpful, friendly, and unselfish, and all other positive personalities. However, it is hard for a real person to have a positive personality in people's minds. Because of that, I agree hero is the highest ideals in society.
To summarize, I think studying for a hero's characteristics is a good way to learn a society but it is not all about society. I also agree that the hero is the highest ideals for society.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 154, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: He
...background and even family environment. he image of the hero exists as a kind of i...
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Line 1, column 157, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'images'.
Suggestion: images
...kground and even family environment. he image of the hero exists as a kind of image t...
^^^^^
Line 2, column 174, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ason is like what I say before, hero is a image that makes people have hope for t...
^
Line 3, column 221, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a hero' or simply 'heros'?
Suggestion: a hero; heros
... any negative personality. For example, a heros accepted standard is helpful, friendly,...
^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, for example, i think, kind of

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.5258426966 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 12.4196629213 24% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 33.0505617978 67% => OK
Preposition: 33.0 58.6224719101 56% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 12.9106741573 15% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1306.0 2235.4752809 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 280.0 442.535393258 63% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.66428571429 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.55969084622 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69579226172 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 133.0 215.323595506 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.475 0.4932671777 96% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 704.065955056 62% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.9563133033 60.3974514979 51% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.0666666667 118.986275619 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.26666666667 5.21951772744 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 10.2758426966 136% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197776227681 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0783568441069 0.0831039109588 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.059479835317 0.0758088955206 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139880019124 0.150359130593 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0337743239749 0.0667264976115 51% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.9 14.1392134831 70% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 48.8420337079 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.75 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.46 8.38706741573 89% => OK
difficult_words: 52.0 100.480337079 52% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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