Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.
Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.
Role model or a hero is a person who other people look up to. Most of the people have a role model who they are inspired from. Role model can be any body, it may be a popular celebrity or even a person's father. The author claims that the best way to understand a character of the society is to examine the people the society chooses as role model. I mostly disagree with the claim the author makes.
Firstly the role models or the heros which are populr only show some part of their life to the general public. There are hidden secrets or facts that most of the people dont have an idea about. So to understand the characteristic of the whole society by examining their role models is not plausible. For example politicians, many of the politicians are role models for people. Only some part of their life is known to the people. General people believe the things the politician has done and accept him as role model but they dont know the correct background behind the role model. Each person has some bad and good habits or features people associate their qualities or hardships with a person and consider him his hero. So to examine the hero and if some negative aspects of his life is found and associating the negative aspects as the character of society is incorrect.
Secondly a society is comprised of various people. Different people have different role models. So judge the character of a society by its role models is difficult. Different people in a society might have contrasting role models so it is not possible to understand a character of society by its role models.
To conclude to judge the characteristics of a society from the role models and heros it chooses is not the correct approach. All the people of the society should be examined and understood. There many people in the society which are hidden gems or heros even those should be considered to be examined.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 146, Rule ID: ANY_BODY[2]
Message: Did you mean 'anybody'?
Suggestion: anybody
...ey are inspired from. Role model can be any body, it may be a popular celebrity or even ...
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Line 3, column 96, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...nly show some part of their life to the general public. There are hidden secrets or facts that...
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Line 3, column 170, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ecrets or facts that most of the people dont have an idea about. So to understand th...
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Line 3, column 527, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...e and accept him as role model but they dont know the correct background behind the ...
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Line 5, column 20, Rule ID: IS_COMPRISED_OF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'comprises' or 'consists of' or 'is composed of'?
Suggestion: comprises; consists of; is composed of
...ety is incorrect. Secondly a society is comprised of various people. Different people have d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, firstly, if, look, may, second, secondly, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 14.8657303371 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 33.0505617978 57% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 12.9106741573 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 2235.4752809 70% => OK
No of words: 337.0 442.535393258 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.62611275964 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52435590648 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 215.323595506 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.415430267062 0.4932671777 84% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 518.4 704.065955056 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 6.24550561798 32% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.10617977528 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.38483146067 23% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.2370786517 99% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4219713909 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.95 118.986275619 66% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.85 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45 5.21951772744 66% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.83258426966 166% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.485446492387 0.243740707755 199% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.176783162057 0.0831039109588 213% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.155638882225 0.0758088955206 205% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.336341071108 0.150359130593 224% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.067876647507 0.0667264976115 102% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.8 14.1392134831 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.28 12.1639044944 76% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.15 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 100.480337079 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.8971910112 63% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.