Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.Write a response in wh

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Claim: The best way to understand the character of a society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models.

Reason: Heroes and role models reveal a society's highest ideals.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

The claim that the best way to understand the character of society is to examine the character of the men and women that the society chooses as its heroes or its role models, doesn't seems to be cogent. The claim is in fact undermined by the reason itself. As evident from the reason that Heroes and role models are often portrayed to reveal society's highest ideals, so they tend to ignore the other side of the coin which is equally important to understand.

A society is an eclectic mix of different people, different beliefs. Some of the belief may be wrong and some may be good. However, role models are often viewed as one having impeccable character. Although, they can be seen as reflection of society's character to some extent but cannot be taken to determine the society's character as a whole. To illustrate, A hero can be someone who fights against crime, who helps poor people by giving them money and food, helps children by underwriting their school expenses but does it mean that all the people in society are so much concerned towards this issue ? There may be few who might care but saying that society as a whole is very generous and full of people who believe in giving and helping others may not be true.

Also, heroes and role models are shown as flawless and their character tend to incline more towards the positive side. No one wants to choose a hero who's having a flaw in his character. As such, we will tend to overlook certain aspects of the society, if we take their character as a measure to judge society as a whole. To better find out the society's nature, the better option is to examine some if not all, members of society and to look at society from a wide angle.

Furthermore, a society is better understood not by its few role models but by its common, prosaic people. Role models are often showed to show the society's ideals, the thing that a society wishes to achieve. For instance, consider a small town with rampant graft and venal officials. Now, apparently, such society wants to be free of corruption. Now, if, in this situation an official came out to be like a hero who daringly exposed few politicians who tried to bribe him to do something illegal, will obviously be viewed as role-model or hero for others. But still the question is, can we still judge or examine the society's character by this person only ? Emphatic No !
That society can have still many corrupt officials. Some of them may get influenced by this hero but not all. Hence, that prevalent venal officers and corruption will still be present and hence, portraying the society's character as a clean, free of corruption is obviously not right.

In a nutshell, our role models cast light on what we want to achieve, what should be the ideal characteristic. I feel having a role model is more like having a figure that we should follow for better society and harmony. They must be viewed as people emitting characteristics that everyone in the society must follow. However, since people may get influenced and may not, so, these role models in no way should be seen from the perspective of understanding the society's character.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 70, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: Some
...of different people, different beliefs. Some of the belief may be wrong and some may be goo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, apparently, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, look, may, so, still, for instance, i feel, in fact

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 30.0 19.5258426966 154% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 14.8657303371 155% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.3162921348 159% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 33.0505617978 115% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalization wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2650.0 2235.4752809 119% => OK
No of words: 555.0 442.535393258 125% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77477477477 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.85370353223 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76020804912 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 215.323595506 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.448648648649 0.4932671777 91% => OK
syllable_count: 828.9 704.065955056 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Interrogative: 2.0 0.740449438202 270% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.77640449438 56% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.2674299097 60.3974514979 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.923076923 118.986275619 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3461538462 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.11538461538 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.472249514804 0.243740707755 194% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.141815862255 0.0831039109588 171% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.134354355716 0.0758088955206 177% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.299087840605 0.150359130593 199% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.179428740242 0.0667264976115 269% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 14.1392134831 83% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 12.1639044944 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 95.0 100.480337079 95% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK

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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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