Claim: Even though young people often receive the advice to “follow your dreams,” more emphasis should be placed on picking worthy goals.
Reason: Many people’s dreams are inherently selfish.
Enforing certain goals in mind of our young children is not the right way to go about preparing them for adulthood. I believe, the child must be given freedom to decide what he or she wants to pursue in life. The claim bases its recommendation on the fact that we are innately programmed to chose selfish goals. But this basis is also not a sound one to justify the recommendation. Lets find out why.
The claim emphasises the need to channel young people towards what we consider "worthy goals". However, what defines worthiness ? In our society today, we find that there is so many avenues that p...
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Sentence: In conclusion, the claim is unjustified in asserting that the we must emphasise on youngsters to pick what we consider worthy goals.
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Sentence: The reaons is simple, the definition of worthiness is an evolving one.
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