Claim Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive Reason It is primarily in cities that a nation s cultural traditions are preserved and generated Write a response in which you discuss the ext

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Claim: Governments must ensure that their major cities receive the financial support they need in order to thrive.

Reason: It is primarily in cities that a nation's cultural traditions are preserved and generated.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the claim and the reason on which that claim is based.

Scholars, administrators, and policymakers have diverging approaches in terms of the government’s distribution of financial support. Amongst them, the one dominant approach is to provide such aid to the nation’s major cities. The argument being that these cities are where the country’s cultural traditions have been fostered and thus need preserving. While there is some merit to this argument, this essay argues that such an approach is not an entirely sagacious one for three reasons.

To begin, given that major cities are not the only nor always primary source of a nation’s cultural traditions, they do not always deserve to gain unconditional governmental aid. Indeed, towns, villages, and other non-major cities have been cultural hubs for myriad nations. For instance, Chandigarh is full of rich architectural history, beautiful and antiquated campuses, and other artistic landmarks (e.g. Nek Chand’s rock garden). Considering all these culturally rich aspects to this city, the government should ensure they are protected and preserved. Otherwise, our progeny will lose out on all the beauty such a city has to offer. Similarly, there are other non-major cities who hold incontrovertible cultural significance, and thus warrant governmental support. Should governments focus solely on major cities at the expense of these locations, a spate of nations’ history and culture will be lost forever.

Furthermore, the prompt’s reasoning is flawed as it assumes governments should base their apportionment of financial aid solely on the cultural significance a place holds. Yet, there are can be more imperative aspects that ought to be used as the criteria for financial aid. For instance, if a country is plagued by terrorism, hate crimes, and gratuitous violence, then should not combating these issues take precedence over preservation of cultural traditions? Indeed, there are several moments in history which illustrate this. Inter alia, Indira Gandhi’s decision to attack Sikh terrorists in Amritsar’s holy Golden Temple stands out as a noteworthy case in point. At that moment, the government rightly placed national security over cultural and religious preservation. It is likely innocent lives would have been lost had they chosen otherwise. Hence, governments should not sclerotic by solely focusing on a cultural preservation and generation as their key criterion for key decisions, including financial aid.

Thirdly, it should also be noted that major cities often are economic and technological centres. Hence, it is likely that they already have the means to address their various needs, including the care of their cultural traditions. For instance, tourists across the globe travel to see Tokyo’s infamous cherry blossoms in the spring. Similarly, Agra’s Taj Mahal and Delhi’s Lotus Temple attract similar numbers. Given the lucrative earnings from the tourism sector such cities earn, any additional financial support may be extraneous. Yet, such support would not go unappreciated in other culturally rich yet neglected cities. Indeed, these smaller cities may use this aid to not only protect and promote their traditions, but also to further develop them.

Lastly, it would be fair to concede that there is some strength in the author’s claim and reasoning. That is, major cities are often the source of a country’s cultural traditions, and thus need to be preserved through several means (including financial aid). Indeed, several cities have provided mankind’s most notable cultural achievements, such as the Taj Mahal in Agra, Big Ben in London, and Venice’s rococo architecture. Nevertheless, governments cannot turn a blind eye on the cultural significance of smaller cities and towns, nor neglect other more pressing needs.

In summary, the issue of apportioning financial aid is a convoluted one. While this essay acknowledged the cultural value of these larger cultural hubs and the importance of preserving them, governments should not do so at the expense of other smaller cultural hubs and other pressing needs. As with most of life’s aspects, our governments should be lissome and provident when making such decisions.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb 'should' requires the base form of the verb: 'combat'
Suggestion: combat
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, e.g., furthermore, hence, if, lastly, may, nevertheless, similarly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, while, as to, for instance, in summary, such as

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 19.5258426966 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 25.0 14.8657303371 168% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 60.0 58.6224719101 102% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3567.0 2235.4752809 160% => OK
No of words: 640.0 442.535393258 145% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.5734375 5.05705443957 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02973371873 4.55969084622 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96524422938 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 322.0 215.323595506 150% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503125 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1080.9 704.065955056 154% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 9.0 1.77640449438 507% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 33.0 20.2370786517 163% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.4313258882 60.3974514979 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.090909091 118.986275619 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.3939393939 23.4991977007 83% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.78787878788 5.21951772744 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.83258426966 228% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.285381700584 0.243740707755 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0743300890395 0.0831039109588 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0501679083655 0.0758088955206 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157906858138 0.150359130593 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0419130984672 0.0667264976115 63% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.1392134831 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.73 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.03 12.1639044944 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.38706741573 107% => OK
difficult_words: 177.0 100.480337079 176% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 70.83 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.25 Out of 6
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