EDUCATIONAL INSTITUTIONS HAVE A RESPONSIBILITY TO DISSUADE STUDENTS FROM PURSUING FIELDS OF STUDY IN WHICH THEY ARE UNLIKELY TO SUCCEED.
Success is very subjective, it varies to a great extent, as small as earning a days’ payment to fulfill their stomach or it can big as running the franchise of million dollars and making sure the franchise with-holds the profit annually. The memo is trying to tell that the educational institutes should play a major role in choosing an area of study such that the course will lead to success and not fail in that. Education institutes are the sculpture for student life, keeping this in mind institutions shouldn’t be discouraging their students from pursuing any kind of field, but a have the responsibility to make their students choose wide range as job market around the world in very unstable. To take my side here are two reasons.
Change is inevitable, so is the job market and the knowledge are required for success. The more successive jobs in history are now not even preferred such as nuclear engineering was one of the top jobs during mid-nineteen century but its value in current generations is not that great. On similar grounds, the information technology which flourished in the late nineteenth century in the western countries which impacted their value raise in the Asian countries at the start of the twenty-first century attracted a lot of job opportunities. Now the software fields such as information technology, data scientists are for a great deal of success in their professions, But who knows if information technology will be evergreen in its success? Therefore, institutes should encourage them to join different fields even ifn they don’t succeed because one can never know which field will bloom in the generations to go.
According to Forbes research, the normal rate of people changing their jobs is around five years. People easily get bored of the same work, and even overburdened in their job or due to others reasons seek new job opportunity for their lively hood. They are likely to explore the wide job market which is why the education they receive should not stick to courses that will yield success, as success is very subjective! Suppose, consider a small example that the person is good at horse riding and accounting but loves horse riding. Since the person may not succeed in horse riding as much the person will be in accounting, will be forced to join an accounting course, and maybe even find a suitable job in accounting that yields greater success but won’t be happy. This might deeply affect the mental health of the person.
Thus universities have the responsibility of encouraging their students to take any kind of courses irrespective of the success made out of the job. Students must be getting the overall education and be prepared for any kind of opportunities and this will happen if the courses he/she will be studying will have all kinds of courses and not just the stream in which they will succeed.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'bored with'?
Suggestion: bored with
...is around five years. People easily get bored of the same work, and even overburdened in...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
...ect the mental health of the person. Thus universities have the responsibility of...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, so, therefore, thus, kind of, of course, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.5258426966 123% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.4196629213 145% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 33.0505617978 94% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 58.6224719101 96% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 12.9106741573 54% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2394.0 2235.4752809 107% => OK
No of words: 486.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92592592593 5.05705443957 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69525374022 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74171376344 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 215.323595506 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.506172839506 0.4932671777 103% => OK
syllable_count: 729.9 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 6.24550561798 48% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 30.0 23.0359550562 130% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.298987377 60.3974514979 125% => OK
Chars per sentence: 149.625 118.986275619 126% => OK
Words per sentence: 30.375 23.4991977007 129% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 5.21951772744 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.215278612005 0.243740707755 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.065492372917 0.0831039109588 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0850375279737 0.0758088955206 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141473437623 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0670019188617 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
automated_readability_index: 17.0 14.1392134831 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.49 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.91 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.5 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 100.480337079 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 11.8971910112 160% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.0 11.2143820225 125% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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