Educational institutions should actively encourage their students to choose fields of study that will prepare them for lucrative careers.
The speaker strongly advocates that students should be guided and uplifted to choose fields of study that would lead them to lucrative careers in future. Despite the fact that educational institutions are obligated to help students be prepared to survive the real world after graduation, their main role should be expanding students’ horizons, encouraging them to figure out their passion, and achieving personal fulfillment.
The speaker’s claim is based on a myth widespread in today’s society that economic success is the most important measure of personal accomplishment. Consequently, those jobs that have a generous salary tend to be thought of as prestigious enterprises, whereas equally noble professions, such as social work, the performing arts and teaching which unfortunately do not pay as well, are considered common and average. I think, however, it’s more important to assess one’s talent and interests, and find a job that the both of talent and interest could fit into. One would feel fulfilled when he excels in his work; moreover, he would also be willing to develop skills in order to meet higher demands, which would further improve his work performance in turn. In contrast, it would be miserable for someone who end up doing something they are not interested in or not suitable for, however highly-paid as it is. They may not be enjoying their work and lack the motivation or capability to improve their working efficiency. Thus, they chance for long-term personal fulfillment will be very small.
Besides, there exist no such majors that could secure lucrative careers in future. A booming industry that provides well-paid jobs cannot necessarily keep growing fast in the next decade.
On one hand, almost all the industries are susceptible to the business cycle. Some industries that flourish during expansionary periods may suffer severely during contractions, like retail, restaurants and hotels. On the other hand, some unexpected events might abruptly cause drastic disruptions to or even reshape certain industries that were associated with lucrative careers prior to the event. For instance, the airline industry, with a large number of highly-paid pilots, was dealt a massive blow by the 11 September attacks, and now has been hit harder than ever in living memory by the novel coronavirus crisis. As COVID-19 continues to sap demand, a lot of companies within the industry had no choice but to urge employees, pilots included, to take extended leaves or even have potential mass job cuts. Therefore, even if some students may make up their to pursue lucrative careers, education institutions can hardly guarantee that by encouraging them to choose certain fields of study, because they surely cannot foresee lucrative careers in future.
Admittedly, it would bring some advantages to students that have related background in hunting lucrative jobs. However, to get a well-paid job and excel in the career requires a set of additional skills that are not usually taught in class, including strong learning capability, great interpersonal skills, showing diligence at work, and etc. It is not difficult to catch up on the basic knowledge of a certain job even though someone probably did not take relevant courses at school; in fact, people would find it relatively painless to switch to a new well-paid career if they have developed the skills mentioned.
To sum up, educational institutions do have the responsibility to prepare students to have a successful and fulfilling career in future, but not prematurely concentrating on the lucrative fields. What schools really should do is to help students to figure out their strength, interests, and future goals, and also to show the various job types available in the real world, so students can choose their own career path with confidence.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, however, if, may, moreover, really, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, for instance, i think, in contrast, in fact, such as, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 19.5258426966 108% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.3162921348 150% => OK
Pronoun: 40.0 33.0505617978 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 81.0 58.6224719101 138% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3242.0 2235.4752809 145% => OK
No of words: 610.0 442.535393258 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.31475409836 5.05705443957 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96972615649 4.55969084622 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87662460087 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 346.0 215.323595506 161% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.567213114754 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 988.2 704.065955056 140% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 10.0 4.38483146067 228% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.2370786517 109% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 63.6880958557 60.3974514979 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.363636364 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.7272727273 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.54545454545 5.21951772744 164% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 7.80617977528 115% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 17.0 10.2758426966 165% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.317229367934 0.243740707755 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0825518081609 0.0831039109588 99% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104373742799 0.0758088955206 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.171101973746 0.150359130593 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.132217610305 0.0667264976115 198% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.4 14.1392134831 123% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 48.8420337079 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 12.1743820225 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.81 12.1639044944 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.32 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 168.0 100.480337079 167% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 11.8971910112 122% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 83.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.0 Out of 6
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