I disagree with the claim that individuals in a society have a responsibility to obey just laws and to disobey and resist unjust laws. I believe individuals are responsible to obey laws, whether they seem just or unjust. Promoting the idea that members of a society ought to disobey and resist any law with which they disagree is dangerous. We should encourage society members to use proper channels to challenge the laws which they believe are unjust.
Our society is based on democratic law. As such, our current laws represent the values and needs of our society as a whole. If an individual of our society disagrees with a particular law, we could all be in danger if that individuals belief conflicts with the greater good of our society. For example, if John believes he should be able to use methamphetamines, and therefore chooses to produce them in his home despite the current ban on methamphetmines in our country, this could put many other individuals in danger. Methamphetamine production creates many toxic byproducts, and faulty production can result in dangerous explosions, both of which put his neighbors in harms way. John may be justified in his choice to endanger himself by using methampehtamines, but he is not justified to endanger his neighbors.
Some might argue that obeying unjust laws only serves to reinforce those laws, but I disagree. Many laws in our country and been changed or modified over the years. An important example is abortion. Abortion was previously illeagal in our country. In resistance to the unjust laws, many women obtained illegal abortions. These abortions were not safe and were often performed under unsanitary conditions. Through out legal system, we have now ensured that women have the legal right to abortion. Seeking action through appropriate channels did not reinforce prohibition of abortion, but led to it’s legalization. By following the proper legal channels, and obtaining legalized abortion, woman now have access to abortions at safe and sanitary medical facilties, and the unjust laws were changed.
As responsible citzens, we have the right to obey laws. The responsible response to unjust laws is to change them.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 224, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'individuals'' or 'individual's'?
Suggestion: individuals'; individual's
... law, we could all be in danger if that individuals belief conflicts with the greater good ...
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Line 5, column 406, Rule ID: THROUGH_OUT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'throughout'?
Suggestion: Throughout
... performed under unsanitary conditions. Through out legal system, we have now ensured that ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 12.4196629213 64% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 36.0 33.0505617978 109% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 58.6224719101 85% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 12.9106741573 77% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1842.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 356.0 442.535393258 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.17415730337 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34372677135 4.55969084622 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96372143459 2.79657885939 106% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 215.323595506 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.530898876404 0.4932671777 108% => OK
syllable_count: 580.5 704.065955056 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 49.7248665989 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.7142857143 118.986275619 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.9523809524 23.4991977007 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.90476190476 5.21951772744 36% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 10.2758426966 68% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 5.13820224719 195% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.299533312999 0.243740707755 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.102434620392 0.0831039109588 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.118365769945 0.0758088955206 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.217078710629 0.150359130593 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.136025101413 0.0667264976115 204% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.4 14.1392134831 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.8420337079 113% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.41 12.1639044944 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.6 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.