Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Education and discussing about different types of it has always been a controversial issue. While some people believe formal type of education have several merits, some maintain it has some disadvantages like limitation our minds and spirits which I will debate now.
Formal education has been used for several centuries and provide good enviroment for students to learn various subjects ranging from philosephy and law to mathematics and chemistry. It can broden our horizens due to the fact that help us to survey others findings and understand their ideas. Then students could pursue their favorite subjects to have innovations or expand their ideas.
On the other hand, opponents of formal education claim that the structure of it limit our minds and we can think just according to the menthods that are provided by this type of education. As a result it can destroy innovatiove sense in human being or at least weaken it. For example, in order to find a medicen for cancer, scientists more think about old methods for fighting with this disease and try to improve the old methods, while it is possible to find a method that completely different with the old ones and completely novel for the science. This type of innovative actions rarely has been happened in the scientific world and it is due to the formal education.
However, some experts claims that both could be benefitial and by doing some samll changes we can take advantage of the both. The formal education help students to be familair of basic knowledge wich is necessary for pursuing education such as reading and writing in primary school. In some classes, teachers can eliminate the limitations of the class and provide an interactive class and use students' attendence for teaching that help students to expand their mind and think differently.
Finally, governments and city councils could play a vital role to make better situations for students. For example, they could provide different competitions between student to invoke their innovative sense such as presenting a problem of the city or country and give suggestion from pupil to solve it.
In conclusion, I believe although formal education have some merits, nevertheless it is possible for teachers or governments to change some charactristics and prepare better conditions for students.
Comments
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has rarely been
...cience. This type of innovative actions rarely has been happened in the scientific world and it...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 378.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15079365079 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76368939281 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0921025248 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.8 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.21951772744 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132172146851 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458703948594 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347051350468 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722060225867 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305331690895 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 583, Rule ID: ADVERB_WORD_ORDER[7]
Message: The adverb 'rarely' is usually put between 'has' and 'been'.
Suggestion: has rarely been
...cience. This type of innovative actions rarely has been happened in the scientific world and it...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, however, if, nevertheless, so, then, while, at least, for example, in conclusion, such as, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 14.8657303371 148% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 58.6224719101 75% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 12.9106741573 108% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1947.0 2235.4752809 87% => OK
No of words: 378.0 442.535393258 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15079365079 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40933352052 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76368939281 2.79657885939 99% => OK
Unique words: 196.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.518518518519 0.4932671777 105% => OK
syllable_count: 608.4 704.065955056 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.2370786517 74% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 23.0359550562 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.0921025248 60.3974514979 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.8 118.986275619 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.2 23.4991977007 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.66666666667 5.21951772744 166% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 7.80617977528 13% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.83258426966 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.132172146851 0.243740707755 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0458703948594 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347051350468 0.0758088955206 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0722060225867 0.150359130593 48% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0305331690895 0.0667264976115 46% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 14.1392134831 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 48.8420337079 94% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 12.1743820225 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.89 8.38706741573 106% => OK
difficult_words: 96.0 100.480337079 96% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 11.8971910112 101% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 11.2143820225 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.