Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take In developing and su

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Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.

Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.

In contrast to the statement, I consider that while formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits, some curriculums still set them free.
Formal education tends to make all students in the nation study the same curriculum so that the government can choose the part that they want to let their students know. The government can choose some parts that are conducive to their reputation and eliminate the parts that are detrimental to them. For example, there was a miserable event in Taiwan about seventy years ago. The government made a terrible decision, which made some people dead. Therefore, nowadays there is a celebration that memorizes those people. However, when our school learns about this event, the book only talks very little about it. It makes students can not easily realize the whole event.
Moreover, Formal education also teaches students what is wrong or what is correct. It can control our minds and spirits when we make the decision. For instance, our school teaches us that we can not hit others no matter what he or she roars at you. We need to be calm about their provocative words and do not fight with them. However, does such a way be the best or only approach to cope with them? Some poeple will consider that we need to repel back so that they will not bully again. Therefore, many of us are influenced by formal education.
However, there are more curriculums in formal education that give students more decision to choose what they want to learn. They can choose the class that has a different view with the major of the society. They will not be restrained by the school that asks.
In my opinion, I consider that formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits, while sometimes it still set them free.

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Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.4196629213 89% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 14.8657303371 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.3162921348 141% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 33.0505617978 148% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 29.0 58.6224719101 49% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1453.0 2235.4752809 65% => OK
No of words: 305.0 442.535393258 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.76393442623 5.05705443957 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17902490978 4.55969084622 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.39330787853 2.79657885939 86% => OK
Unique words: 154.0 215.323595506 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504918032787 0.4932671777 102% => OK
syllable_count: 445.5 704.065955056 63% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 3.0 4.99550561798 60% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 23.0359550562 69% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1818758029 60.3974514979 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 76.4736842105 118.986275619 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.0526315789 23.4991977007 68% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.68421052632 5.21951772744 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.83258426966 145% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.198945421607 0.243740707755 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.058392940871 0.0831039109588 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0651425637388 0.0758088955206 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.141475368419 0.150359130593 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0788834206653 0.0667264976115 118% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 14.1392134831 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 48.8420337079 130% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 12.1743820225 69% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.03 12.1639044944 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.17 8.38706741573 85% => OK
difficult_words: 53.0 100.480337079 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.2143820225 75% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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