Formal education tends to restrain our minds and spirits rather than set them free.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Formal education expects us to follow the beaten path and thus restrains us to a specific way of learning, rather than setting us free. Formal Education prevents us from precious experience with life which cannot be obtained by sitting in a classroom.
Formal education is Monotonous. It has a specific time period, specific amount of topics to study and is based on some or the other grading system. This traps students into a specific 'cage' of Study. They have a very little scope to explore new things other than studying old ones. It transforms students into tamed and trained horse in the sport of Horse racing, whose sole aim is to run along the 'fenced' track to win.For instance, A student has to study 4-5 Subjects including Math, Science, Literature, History.etc. The student has to complete his work within specified deadlines, even if he requires more time to understand it. He cannot focus on one subject and explore on it for longer time as, he has to focus on other subjects too. The students are then judged by a banal grading Test, which asks the same questions for years and years without creativity. This system forces students to focus on acquiring higher grades than actually understanding the pith of a certain subject. This prevents them from exploring the desired subjects, which might shape their future.
Moreover, Formal education focuses only on few subjects. The subjects which the Syllabus makers think unimportant are given less priority in grading system. This demotivates students desiring to study such subjects. Students then have to study undesired subjects, resulting in obtaining less grades and also losing interest in education. For instance, a Student having an artistic acumen will love to focus and pursue arts rather than other subjects. But since arts have less importance than the so-called more technical subjects like Sciences and Math, the subject of Art will be considered inferior, and the student will need to study these technical subjects to get a decent grades to pass the class. This also has negative effect on the overall grades of the students in a class. Not all students can be good at scoring grades, and definitely not good in subjects they dislike. Thus Formal education snatches the freedom to follow your desires and passion.
However, Some people might say that Formal education is disciplined and well organised as it has more holistic approach. This approach can help people to discover and explore their passion in various subjects, but helps a little for the people who have already decided their field of study. This approach acts like a unnecessary burden for those and drags them down in their pursuit by becoming a hurdle in their way.
Thus, Formal Education which was aimed for educating students and making them able to think free is defeating its own purpose by restraining minds to do only specifically preferred tasks and doing injustice to the others. This has surely trapped the minds and spirits than setting them free.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... obtained by sitting in a classroom. Formal education is Monotonous. It has a speci...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: For
...is to run along the fenced track to win.For instance, A student has to study 4-5 Su...
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Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun grades is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...esired subjects, resulting in obtaining less grades and also losing interest in educ...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...tely not good in subjects they dislike. Thus Formal education snatches the freedom t...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...field of study. This approach acts like a unnecessary burden for those and drags ...
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'minds doing'.
Suggestion: minds doing
...efeating its own purpose by restraining minds to do only specifically preferred tasks and d...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, however, if, moreover, so, then, thus, well, as to, for instance
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.4196629213 81% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 33.0505617978 112% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 12.9106741573 93% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2514.0 2235.4752809 112% => OK
No of words: 499.0 442.535393258 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0380761523 5.05705443957 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.55969084622 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.52005263008 2.79657885939 90% => OK
Unique words: 256.0 215.323595506 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513026052104 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 704.065955056 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 6.0 4.99550561798 120% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 23.0359550562 82% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 53.2183872882 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.6923076923 118.986275619 81% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1923076923 23.4991977007 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.26923076923 5.21951772744 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 7.80617977528 77% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 5.13820224719 97% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.83258426966 186% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.150091573989 0.243740707755 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0503333958103 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0543040733272 0.0758088955206 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112519566937 0.150359130593 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0720577167139 0.0667264976115 108% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 14.1392134831 84% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 48.8420337079 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.1743820225 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.95 12.1639044944 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.41 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 100.480337079 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 11.8971910112 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 9.6 11.2143820225 86% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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