Common welfare of a country should be a better symbol of nation's greatness rather than achivement of rulers, artists or scientist, as the author asserts. It is the responsibilities for a country to improve the citizen's welfare in order to ensure the people's living standard, but in some cases, a country should also pay more attentions on the achievement of other realms. In my opinion, a government should both improve its general welfare and the score of the higher level field.
At first, it is good for a country to improve their common welfare if the country is encountering some problems such as difficulty of finding a medical service or that of seeking a job position. Because it can keep a stability of the society for avoiding people who losed their job and that without any financial source have to rob or steal. For example, in some North-Europe country with high welfare for people, the security of the whole society remain constant become almost all of people could have ability to find a content job position that provides a good financial income for them. What's more, it is because of the high welfare in North Europe country that the people could have a opportunity to have a free medical care and education in their city, which means that people living there could see a doctor or go to school without paying any money. If the country could give the citizen enough welfare, people would be proud of their government and the country would be to some extent great for the people.
Nevertheless, the achievement of the higher realm of the country could also be regarded as achievements. Higher achievement could improve the country's prestige in the global society. For example, the biologist YouYou Tu, who has successfully invented the artemisinin in order to solve the dangerous problem made by the malaria, fill up the blank for curing a specific dangerous disease at that time. Her reaserch consequence of the artemisinin was published in almost all of the well-known academic magazine such as SCI, EI and SCIENCE. Not only was her achievement in the biology science save thousands of people's live, but also the achievement fosters the progress of science in the whole world and global academy. Bill Clinton, the first Ameican leader and still the only president who made the country without any debt. In his time, he innovatively established the NAFTA, which is the short of North Ameican Free Trade Agrement, with Mexico and Canada. The US economy has experienced a considerable improvemnt after the constituting that new agreement and remain economy progress energy in the last several decades.
All in all, it would be essential for a country to focus both on the general welfare and the achievement in higher field, which would cause the whole country acquire good reputation both in the common citizen and the global society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: What's
...vides a good financial income for them. Whats more, it is because of the high welfare...
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Suggestion: an
...rope country that the people could have a opportunity to have a free medical care...
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Suggestion: all the
...the artemisinin was published in almost all of the well-known academic magazine such as SC...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, nevertheless, so, still, well, for example, such as, in my opinion, in some cases
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.5258426966 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 14.8657303371 114% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.3162921348 115% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 33.0505617978 73% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 12.9106741573 147% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2373.0 2235.4752809 106% => OK
No of words: 481.0 442.535393258 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.93347193347 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68313059816 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67777404727 2.79657885939 96% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 215.323595506 104% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467775467775 0.4932671777 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 756.0 704.065955056 107% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.2370786517 84% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 23.0359550562 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.2575514083 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.588235294 118.986275619 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.2941176471 23.4991977007 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.05882352941 5.21951772744 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 10.2758426966 127% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.127000856424 0.243740707755 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0453140943425 0.0831039109588 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0429288766048 0.0758088955206 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0921485000446 0.150359130593 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.047413351517 0.0667264976115 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 14.1392134831 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 48.8420337079 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 12.1743820225 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 12.1639044944 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.28 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 100.480337079 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 11.2143820225 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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