Government officials should rely on their own judgment rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people they serve.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
Author asserts that the government officials should make decisions based on their own judgement rather than unquestioningly carry out the will of the people whom they serve. I strongly disagree with this assertion. In my opinion, this would give government officials the liberty to take decisions which will be primarily in their own favour and not to the people they serve.
Basic principle of democracy is “It is for the people, to the people, by the people” this fundamental principle clearly states that it’s the people who should be considered while making judgements. Once government starts making judgement based on their own, primary purpose of democracy would be destroyed. It has been learned from our history that power given to particular group or person leads to an immense suffering of the people. For Instance, North Korea today is fighting with severe inflation while their officials our busy bolstering their defence sector. Officials frivolous attitude towards people needs has resulted in starvation of millions of people. Most decisions of officials are inclined towards their betterment leaving people in an abysmal condition.
In addition, when decisions are solely based on government judgement it can give rise to policies that will ensure the current government remains in power indefinitely. Oppositions would be immured in prison and their freedom of speech would be snatched away. Government is most likely to take the control of media so they can maintain a good image among the public. For example, Communists party of China controls everything in China from Media to their Banking norms and no one dares to go against them. JackMa a renowned businessmen in China recently commented on their flawed banking policies and in next few months Jack Ma’s assets were stripped off.
However, I concede that some judgements should be handed over to government especially those that requires domain expertise because people interference would just impede the decision making process. There should exist a balance between the viewpoint of government officials and people its serves to make the country a better place to live in.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, so, while, for example, for instance, in addition, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 14.8657303371 40% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.3162921348 88% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 33.0505617978 100% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 58.6224719101 82% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 12.9106741573 163% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1826.0 2235.4752809 82% => OK
No of words: 342.0 442.535393258 77% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.33918128655 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30037696126 4.55969084622 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.66643581642 2.79657885939 95% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 215.323595506 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.576023391813 0.4932671777 117% => OK
syllable_count: 558.9 704.065955056 79% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.2370786517 79% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 41.0723447103 60.3974514979 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 114.125 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.375 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5625 5.21951772744 87% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 7.80617977528 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.237099480594 0.243740707755 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0810969644615 0.0831039109588 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0766274129134 0.0758088955206 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.159396713972 0.150359130593 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.106495474555 0.0667264976115 160% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 48.8420337079 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 12.1743820225 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 12.1639044944 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.16 8.38706741573 109% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 100.480337079 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 11.8971910112 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.