Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
What are the responsibilities of any democratic government towards its citizens? Does the arts field is as important as military when it comes to budget distribution? Well, the argument suggests that the government should invest as much in the arts as they do in military. The statement is too extreme to be agree with, however, I believe that the government should invest in the arts after all the basic necessities of their citizens will be satisfied, and regardless how much the government has invested in the military.
The government has responsibility to provide all the basic needs to its citizens like : Food, good education, safe residential, and protection to their human-rights and their safety. After these necessities have been satisfied, the government can invest into the artistic fields to encourage the art because if people's basic needs and safety are the most important aspect for any nation. When people's basic needs will be protected and satisfied, then the other things like the arts or leisure will matter.
We know that the democratic government means-by the people, for the people and to the people. The government has responsibilities to provide safe environment to its public. For example, we know every year the United States allocates billions of dollars of investment in the military for the improvement in the facilities and research and development of new weapons to show how strong the US's defense system is. Large part of budget goes to military every year and it is necessary too as other countries are developing nuclear weapons too. If the country tries to invade into our country will must answer them back if it requires. Therefore, nations invest huge part of their budget into the military.
However, the government cannot just focus on the military too as their are other important fields like education, employment issues, economical crisis, internal problems within the system, crimes, health-care, public transports, etc. If the government invest as much in the arts as they do in the military, they won't have adequate budget to satisfy above requirements. Thus, I believe that any government should provide budget for basic necessities and then they can invest into the arts.
In the final analysis, the government should invest into the arts as the artist are the ones who will represent the nation at inter-national levels. But the government should not undermine the importance of the military and other basic needs of people too.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, then, therefore, thus, well, after all, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 19.5258426966 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.4196629213 113% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 14.8657303371 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.3162921348 62% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 33.0505617978 79% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 58.6224719101 80% => OK
Nominalization: 25.0 12.9106741573 194% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 2235.4752809 93% => OK
No of words: 403.0 442.535393258 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18114143921 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.48049772903 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85859262726 2.79657885939 102% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 215.323595506 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.451612903226 0.4932671777 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 651.6 704.065955056 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.10617977528 129% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.77640449438 169% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4544639876 60.3974514979 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 116.0 118.986275619 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3888888889 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.83333333333 5.21951772744 73% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 7.80617977528 64% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 5.13820224719 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.438179700483 0.243740707755 180% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.153140817793 0.0831039109588 184% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.153108056194 0.0758088955206 202% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.289964943176 0.150359130593 193% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.165059021698 0.0667264976115 247% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 14.1392134831 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.1639044944 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.38706741573 97% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 100.480337079 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 11.8971910112 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.7820224719 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.