Some people believe that the most effective means of advancing the development of a society is by focusing on the contributions resulting from the goals of each individual. Others believe that goals pertaining to the whole society provide a necessary unifying direction, without which individual contributions are meaningless.
The author has provided two ways to look into the development of a society : First, by focusing on the contributions resulting from the goals of each individual, and second, that goals pertaining to the whole society provide a necessary unifying direction and without this, individual contributions are meaningless. However, I believe that the any contribution for the society made by any individual or a group, would be equally important and we cannot say that the contributions by individuals are meaningless in compare to unifying directional approach.
We have tons of examples of people who has made remarkable contributions by their own for the society. Many scientific discoveries have been made by many scientists while the public had no faith or no approval for their theories. For examples, White Brothers has been ridicule by their contraries for having and imagine a whole where we can fly in the sky, however, as we all know, flying in a airplane is so usual in today's world thanks to White Brothers and their inventions. In this case we see that the overall society wasn't unified in a single direction but the contribution of White Brothers has been marked as one of the most revolutionary discoveries.
Another supporting example we have right now is Bill Gates. As we know Bill Gates has been contempted for inventing machine like computer and beliving that these computers will be our future. When this happened many people believed that the computers are curse to humans. Though We know that how swifty we have adapted these computers in our lives just because of the benefits it provides to us. Because of computers our medical science has been at its highest peak it was never been. Computers made our lives easy and better in the sense of overall perspective. Therefore, we should not neglect or say that individual contributions are meaningless.
However, I also believe that unified efforts to surve society and people's well being requires one direction and more support from all individuals. For example, one individual cannot save enviornmental global warming we are facing right now. Our coloboration for taking effective steps to save humanity makes huge difference in compare to single individual. Although, even single individual can make difference too and thus we all should provide our individual contribution to save this earth.
All in all, it was wrong to say that individual contribution is meaningless just because it was done by one person. Rather it would be appropriate to say that any contributions made for society is important wherethere it is individual or unified by society. Any development for the well-being of society should be consider as remarkable regardless any further classification.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, thus, well, while, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 19.6327345309 127% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 11.1786427146 134% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 28.8173652695 170% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 55.5748502994 85% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 16.3942115768 85% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2305.0 2260.96107784 102% => OK
No of words: 445.0 441.139720559 101% => OK
Chars per words: 5.1797752809 5.12650576532 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.56307096286 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.01089019927 2.78398813304 108% => OK
Unique words: 214.0 204.123752495 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480898876404 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 705.55239521 105% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.22255489022 71% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8990262246 57.8364921388 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.25 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.25 23.324526521 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.5 5.70786347227 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.25449101796 114% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 8.20758483034 134% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 6.88822355289 116% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255684949265 0.218282227539 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0802166525306 0.0743258471296 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.10841099002 0.0701772020484 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166977469685 0.128457276422 130% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.147494257313 0.0628817314937 235% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 14.3799401198 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.69 48.3550499002 84% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.1 12.197005988 107% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.06 12.5979740519 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.32208582834 96% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 98.500998004 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 12.3882235529 170% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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