Governments should invest as much in the arts as they do in the military.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape your position.
Military is always considered above any other thing in the world. As they are the ones who protects us from any attacks from the outsiders. The more the stronger military power of the country, that country is stated as the powerful country. In my opinion the arts or in other word the beauty that arts gives to country is also equally important as the military of the country. I strongly agree with the statement that the money Government invest in military the same investment should be done in arts also.
To begin, Development should be done inside as well as on the circumference of the country. The richness of the country not only comes from the military power but also the artistic beauty the country has in it. For example, Iraq and Iran these are the countries who main focus is on military aspects. After americans invasion on Iraq took place people are afraid to visit those country as there is war going on continuously. On the other hand Paris a country most people dream to visit. Has more artistic beauty than any other country, Not just artistic beauty there military is also good enough which makes people visit that place more than other countries. This example gives us a view that developing or investing in arts helps the country to increase their inner beauty and makes country look rich not in wealth but in terms of beauty.
Furthermore, Keeping of ancient monuments safe and neat tells much about the country’s belief in artistic value. For Example, India is a country where in ancient times there where any forts of king who used to live in it and rule. All these fort are well maintained and kept clean. These forts are a major tourists spots for foreigners who visit india as well as for the people of india. This example tells us the India Government has deep respect for the heritage and values arts as much as they value military.
In contrast, People often say that the people in military puts there life at stake to protect the country so they should be valued more. I agree with this point , but arts must also be given that respect because if the country focuses only on military the value for the nation inside it will be close to zero as there will not be any tourists attraction by which the country will be famous , nor there will be any sort of efforts to make the country rich in inner beauty.
In conclusion, Government should make efforts to increase the art in the country equivalent to the military. As both the art and military together helps to strengthen the country and grow rapidly.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...tion by which the country will be famous , nor there will be any sort of efforts t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, then, well, as for, for example, in conclusion, in contrast, sort of, as well as, in my opinion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 19.5258426966 102% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.4196629213 72% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 14.8657303371 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 33.0505617978 82% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 58.6224719101 97% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2096.0 2235.4752809 94% => OK
No of words: 451.0 442.535393258 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.64745011086 5.05705443957 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.55969084622 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.32645109575 2.79657885939 83% => OK
Unique words: 194.0 215.323595506 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.430155210643 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 663.3 704.065955056 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 2.0 4.99550561798 40% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.10617977528 97% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.38483146067 137% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 23.0359550562 91% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.689213476 60.3974514979 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.8095238095 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4761904762 23.4991977007 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.2380952381 5.21951772744 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 7.80617977528 128% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 10.2758426966 156% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 5.13820224719 39% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141251517738 0.243740707755 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0502881166881 0.0831039109588 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438711357814 0.0758088955206 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0935676176614 0.150359130593 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0248670084396 0.0667264976115 37% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 14.1392134831 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 48.8420337079 120% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.1743820225 85% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 12.1639044944 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.38706741573 88% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 100.480337079 78% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 11.2143820225 93% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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