Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take

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Governments should offer a free university education to any student who has been admitted to a university but who cannot afford the tuition.

Write a response in which you discuss your views on the policy and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider the possible consequences of implementing the policy and explain how these consequences shape your position.

Nowadays, many people can not afford their tuiton for their university education. Even though they are admitted to a university, they can not enter a university and get a degree. I believe that a free university edcation offered by the governments can help both the young people and the country.

First, there are many young people who are talented but can not be fully educated due to their poor financial conditions. Thus, without high-level degree, it's hard for them to obtain good jobs and change their poor conditions. But things can be different if the govermnments can pay for their tuition. These poor people can get rid of their hard conditions and have high-quality lives after having the chance to enter a university. For example, my father's family was very poor and did not have enough money to pay his tuition. But luckily, he got a scholarship which paid for his tuition. Nowadays, he is a manager in a bio-tech company and earn lots of money. You can see that the education changes his life and leads to a better way. If the governments can offer every people with a free university education, many people's lives can be change in better ways.

Besides, a free university education can help the country too. We know that if a country has a huge gap between wealthy people and poor people, it has a large possibility that there will be a civil war in this country. And the tuition which poor people can be a reseaon that this situation will become even worse. As we all known that, the higher you degree, the more likely you can have a job with a high salary. If poor people want to change their classes, they really need such a job. But due to the lack of chance to get into a university, the poor people's kids can not be as competitive as those wealthy people's kids. As a result, the upper class remins upper class, and the poor people remain poor. If this condition lasts for several decades, people in this country will find that only a small group of people have most parts of this country's wealth. At this moment, the civil war is nor far away. But if the governments can offer a free university education, they give people the accsses to enter the upper classes by being well educated and having powerful skills. Thus, as people know that they can have their own ways to achieve their goals, the possibility of having a civil war decreases. And without huge gaps between classes, it is obviously a good thing for a country to stay in stability.

In conclusion, offering a free education is both good for poor young people and the country. Young people can have the path to achieve their goals while the country avoid to have a too huge gap between wealty people and poor people.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 1192, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'decrease'?
Suggestion: decrease
..., the possibility of having a civil war decreases. And without huge gaps between classes,...
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Line 7, column 166, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'avoid having'.
Suggestion: avoid having
...o achieve their goals while the country avoid to have a too huge gap between wealty people an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, but, first, if, really, thus, well, while, for example, in conclusion, as a result

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.4196629213 169% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 14.8657303371 135% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 33.0505617978 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 38.0 58.6224719101 65% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2227.0 2235.4752809 100% => OK
No of words: 485.0 442.535393258 110% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59175257732 5.05705443957 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.69283662038 4.55969084622 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.42137187737 2.79657885939 87% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 215.323595506 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.430927835052 0.4932671777 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 687.6 704.065955056 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.59117977528 88% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 6.24550561798 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 7.0 1.77640449438 394% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.2370786517 128% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 23.0359550562 78% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 31.248100534 60.3974514979 52% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 85.6538461538 118.986275619 72% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6538461538 23.4991977007 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 5.21951772744 67% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 10.2758426966 97% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 5.13820224719 253% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.83258426966 62% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.123266415325 0.243740707755 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498870432097 0.0831039109588 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0472216649666 0.0758088955206 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.099320302279 0.150359130593 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0394038875862 0.0667264976115 59% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 14.1392134831 67% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 48.8420337079 144% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.92365168539 39% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 12.1743820225 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.34 12.1639044944 77% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.58 8.38706741573 78% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 100.480337079 63% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 11.2143820225 82% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.


Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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