The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves.
One cannot deny how the pace of our lives have become increasingly fastidious and rapid, compared to that just a decade ago. Indutries, the internet, a number of flights tearing across the skies, the modern era is something completely unimaginable to our ancestor. But what exactly has been the consequences and have they been necessarily been on the brighter side?
With the advent of technological progress, we have witnessed massive developments in scientific research. With each day new treatment procedures and drugs are being made for diseases which were previously considered incurable. As of now several diseases, such as AIDS, hepatitis, even cancer are treatable. Advancement in technology has made life more convenient that ever before. With the internet and modern communication technologies, we are able to connect to people throughout the world, find almost any kind of information we want, indulge into multiple sorts of entertainment media and what not. Even transportation has become extremely easy and affordable. Millions of aeroplanes, bullet trains, cruises help people reach their destinations within much lesser time. Finally, with all the multitudes of social media platforms being released daily, the world has truly become a gobal village.
However, modernisation has had a devastating range of adverse effects on our environments. it is evident how industrialisation has led to mass deforestation and loss of flora all over the world. This has led to a major shift in the average climate of the planet leading to global warming. Melting snowcaps and rise in sea levels have posed threat to numerous species around the earth. Human activities have endangered the existence of many species, which has ultimately destroyed the balance of our ecosystem. With the rapid rise in pollution due to industries, cars and burning of fossil fuels, there has been a striking increase in the cases of cardiovascular and pulmonary diseases. on the other hand, these technological giants, required highly educated employees, have pushed people with a lower skill set to the depths of unemployment, poverty and hunger.
In conclusion, it is evident that, although, the Tech Savy and fastidiousness of life has solved multiple problems the way never imagined before, it has also given rise to many devastating consequences. On one hand, we have witnessed how our lives have become more convenient with the development of transportation, communication technologies, and progress in scientific research, one cannot deny the devastating effects that has been brought upon the planet. Decline in forest cover, global warming and extinction of various plants and animal species have drastically changes our ecosystem.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, however, if, so, in conclusion, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 12.4196629213 16% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 14.8657303371 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 58.6224719101 101% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 12.9106741573 132% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2311.0 2235.4752809 103% => OK
No of words: 422.0 442.535393258 95% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47630331754 5.05705443957 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.53239876712 4.55969084622 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.11476192904 2.79657885939 111% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 215.323595506 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.594786729858 0.4932671777 121% => OK
syllable_count: 729.0 704.065955056 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 5.0 4.99550561798 100% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.38483146067 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.2370786517 104% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.4884489145 60.3974514979 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.047619048 118.986275619 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0952380952 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.14285714286 5.21951772744 79% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 7.80617977528 51% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0890488948293 0.243740707755 37% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0235610295672 0.0831039109588 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462996617293 0.0758088955206 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0545229071908 0.150359130593 36% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.023952467435 0.0667264976115 36% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.72 48.8420337079 87% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.5 12.1639044944 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.87 8.38706741573 118% => OK
difficult_words: 140.0 100.480337079 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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